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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2003-03-05 11:32 PM




how long the wait,
to hold again,
if only for a while,

to sweetly tuck into memory
for safekeeping,
to call upon, some empty winter night,

when all alone and self absorbed,
alienation by choice,
as of late,desperately seeking
more time on her own,
despite the warmth of heart and home,

just needing a thread to hang onto,
to weave a bit of dreaming
into this unfulfilled heart,

spring comes with the next moon,
blossoms will appear,

soothing aching limbs,
welcoming back home
both sleeping flower and song,
if only to sit upon them for a little while,

the season shortly consummated, in a blink,
over too soon after reaching peak,
vanishing along with those that came before,

sadness surrounds the bud on the rose,
visualizing its birth, lamenting its death,
concurrently,
before its first petals even fully open,

watching my seeds
grow in front of my eyes,
still cannot surmise,
how they've come from cradle,  
to standing eye to eye with me,
right here and now,

i feel the whispering of love again,
hesitant to let it touch down,
fearing its final chapters
before the story even begins,
i gather up rose petals to soften my fall

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (03-06-2003 10:35 PM).]

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the_loner_23
Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA
1 posted 2003-03-05 11:37 PM


I loved the imagery. Awesome work.

Cold hands means a warm heart

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
2 posted 2003-03-05 11:48 PM


inked -

"so sad, the bud on the rose,
visualizing its birth, lamenting its death
concurrently,
before its first petals even fully open,"

ahh this is haunting - lovely and

"i feel the coming of love again,
hesitant to let it touch down,
fearing its final chapters
before the story even begins
i gather rose petals to cradle my fall"

we all tread hesitantly now - dont we?

This was beautiful - again - I sense your motherhood shining through your trials - excellent xxoo

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
3 posted 2003-03-05 11:54 PM


That's some sugar, sugar!  

Just a thread to hang onto!!!
I like that.

What is wrong with your email?
huh huh?  You can drop me a line at
(let me pick one out of my hat...lol) seasidelady2@aol.com~~~ if you feel like it.

Loved your poem girlie~

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (03-06-2003 01:01 AM).]

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
4 posted 2003-03-06 07:12 AM


blues,
maybe that explains the missing love letters
not coming these days!!!!!

ill try u instead,thanks,
thanks loner again for your nice words,
little wing, thanks for really reading, not
skimming, im guilty of that sometimes, just
rushing through.......


bklynboy
Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660
florida
5 posted 2003-03-06 07:31 AM


Wow....you painted such a nice picture with words. I can see everything so clearly in my mind. This was really nice Michele. You never fail to amaze me.
Brad Majors
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since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647
Georgia
6 posted 2003-03-06 09:32 AM


This piece is my favorite by you. Your imagery was very well done!
Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
7 posted 2003-03-06 09:43 AM


I love your style! It's like I'm in freefall and I'm flooded with a variety of images and emotions as I fall to earth---thanks for the rose petals--they softened the landing!

Have a day full of joyous happenings!

EA


QjQ
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since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756
U.S.A.
8 posted 2003-09-21 08:46 PM


                                    

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
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Realm of Supernatural
9 posted 2008-01-29 08:53 PM


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ARCTIC WIND

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