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Ringo
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Saluting with misty eyes

0 posted 2003-03-05 10:36 PM



Young man awakens to his mother's cry
Old man awakens to see his young wife die
The Reaper appears at my own hand
Sending her above, leading me to be damned
I awake in terror in the night
The reality leaves me trembling with fright

Who can tell me what it all means
The life I live, the one in my dreams
Night time haunts me with my own screams

The house on the hill, Lizzy Borden's crime
It was another life, yet I still do time
I've lived this life free of sin and vice
Judgement again, I must die, sacrifice
Murder was done, I've paid now, some eighty years
Cursed to remember till I cry a million tears

When upon my bed I lay
One nights peace is all I pray
I'll continue to dream one more day

[This message has been edited by Balladeer (03-31-2003 04:50 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-03-05 10:41 PM


dreams im always curious. The poem reminds me of a 60's film, black and white. Makes all the difference and i definately think there is an edge in there sumwhere. Comes together nicely though, although i find myself lost in the pictures more than the words, which is a good thing I think You have any more like this? Id like to read them
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2 posted 2003-03-05 10:46 PM


Thank you for the kind words. This was actually inspired by a guitarist in a band I was in discussing (in his drunken stupor) a dream he has about a house near us that, as legend has it, was the scene of a brutal murder and modern haunting.
I'll see what I can come up with for you.

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3 posted 2003-03-06 08:12 AM


Excellent poem...I really liked this.
Eric

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4 posted 2003-03-06 09:21 AM



Sometimes we learn a lot from one's ramblings...in this instance, you garnered a poem...

Well done Ringo - looking forward to more, myself!

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5 posted 2003-03-06 10:01 AM


Dear oh dear! May I suggest a warm cup of milk at bedtime---and stay away from the 11 o'clock news! Perhaps a sound machine with the soothing cadence of waves lapping at the shore...

~ May peace be with you through both your waking--and sleeping!--hours...

Warm hugs,
Earth Angel

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6 posted 2003-03-06 10:22 AM


Ringo, if I hadn't read your comment to the reply, I would have had no idea that these weren't your own personal dreams. You are a very amazing and talented poet. I really look forward to reading more of your work.


By the way, have you put anything in for the book yet? I can't remember. I haven't been there today, yet.

Hugs,
Ethel

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7 posted 2003-03-06 12:24 PM


nice writing!!!!
>>phantom poet<<<

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