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prof.pishnu
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0 posted 2003-03-05 09:31 PM


Clouds above, threatening,
in pain cant you hear?
The screams of the angels
banging on doors, watering the floor,
shattering windows of the stores.

Falling stars, wandering dreams,
souls alight, dieing inside.
The screams of the angels
dropping like flies, no more wings to help in flight,
drops in the ocean, plops of the tap, one less to burn my sight.

Bubbles bursting, whips to the bone,
harsh reality, painless drones.
The death of the angels,
no smile, not a stir,
limping people feel no hurt?

Death inside, outside so prone,
Electronic hearts, simple beats.
Metalic Angels no birth no more.
A simple smile, gracing turn,
to our feet we climb the dirt.

The final chapter, a single burst,
trapped in this reality, slowly to turn.
No more Angels
banging on the doors, watering the floor,
Shattering windows of the stores.

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Martie
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1 posted 2003-03-05 10:09 PM


prof.pishnu....makes me think of a song..There's Holes in the Floor of Heaven"..this is disturbing..the poem, having trouble understanding what you mean really, but I like it, the intensity the feeling of loss..I think it's well done and may be a comment on the state of the world today??  
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2 posted 2003-03-05 10:24 PM


Talk about intense emotions... This isn't one to read alone on a dark night. Definately one for the book.
prof.pishnu
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3 posted 2003-03-05 10:28 PM


lol never good enough for a book, ramblings of a child i think you'll find. Thank you for the comments. It has to do with the classes of people though. the good and the bad if you will, (the ugly wrote it) :P Alot of what i write is me trying to get across a specific feeling, i try and let people relate.
MissKlarmic
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4 posted 2003-03-09 12:36 PM


relating to something with such personal emotion is  ah quite a difficult thing to do for many people.Your pain being more then visible tho even if the purpose of the write was to express a specific feeling.. a specific feeling doesnt seem to come to mind  rather a gathering of emotions. Um all in all very good write.keep up the good work
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