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noah j
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since 2003-03-05
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on the open road with the wind blowing in my hair

0 posted 2003-03-05 01:47 AM


"to an empty bottle of whiskey"

i--
i fell in love once
left my bleeding heart,
open and crying on the stairs
as you,
you calmly walked within the
wide open confines of your
confusing, chaotic life.
i opened myself hoping
good things would
approach me in the dead calm sea
of the night
as i softly whispered secrets into
the silent darkness--
Hoping someone would hear.

© Copyright 2003 noah goldkamp - All Rights Reserved
Jason Lyle
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With my darkling
1 posted 2003-03-05 01:51 AM


I speak often to my seagrams 7, she whispers back "I pollute you", and I sigh and say "I know you whore", and pour another shot.Nice read Noah, welcome to the forums.
Jason

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2 posted 2003-03-05 02:36 AM


Soulful write. I enjoyed it. Welcome to our humble home.
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displaced
3 posted 2003-03-05 02:43 AM


enjoyed the write...welcome to Passions!
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Saluting with misty eyes
4 posted 2003-03-05 02:45 AM


Very well done. Welcome to the board. I look forward to reading more of your thoughts.
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Gaia
5 posted 2003-03-05 12:17 PM


you calmly walked within the
wide open confines of your
confusing, chaotic life.
***************************

The danger zone...best be careful.

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
6 posted 2003-03-05 12:44 PM


Jason yours talk back too!? I though it was just mine. Cognac for me, not cause its more sophisticated but because it could be, making the abuse of it a more degeneratively fun..oh Noah btw great write..weeeee im gone

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (03-05-2003 12:44 PM).]

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7 posted 2003-03-05 02:47 PM


hmm...personally, I think my vodka and I are going to have a "heart to heart" tonight...

Great job...

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