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Susan Caldwell
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0 posted 2003-03-04 09:49 AM



Perfection(3/4/03JDC)

Hello? Right here
Don’t you see me?
I feel you
Acknowledge me.

Look into my eyes
See
The sadness
Love has given
Me

I
Still remain; hurt
But here

Doesn’t my patients
Annoy?
I see you

For what you are
Perfection
You
Search for
In love

Do you really
Think
You are worthy?

You are blind
To not
See
What you
Could have

You hurt me
With your rejection
Yet my feet
Are still

I wait
For you to realize
Me

I will remain
When you give
Up your
Search

I will be
Here
To dry your
Tears

Because I love you
That is perfection



© Copyright 2003 Susan Caldwell - All Rights Reserved
Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2003-03-04 10:19 AM


mmmm...so justice is not all that is blind...

nicely done... and it aches on the page of wanting to be seen and recognized for what you are..and offer to the one it is intended for...

I like the honesty..

Susan Caldwell
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2 posted 2003-03-04 10:21 AM


Thank you!
Robert Frazier
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3 posted 2003-03-04 10:32 AM


combine a bit of honesty and sadness - a perfect recipe for poetry!

Rf

BluesSerenade
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4 posted 2003-03-04 10:53 AM


Love hurts but I still say it's worth it.

We just have to learn to move along and let it be.

*enjoyed*

Brad Majors
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5 posted 2003-03-04 11:01 AM


I love this. very well done. The longing comes through very strongly
Brad Majors
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6 posted 2003-03-04 12:19 PM


everyone got to read this
Phantom Poet
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7 posted 2003-03-04 01:46 PM


the truest words are felt in the heart
>>phantom poet<<

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2003-03-04 01:49 PM


Susan,
If not perfection, then close to it, enjoyed.

JamesMichael
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9 posted 2003-03-04 03:48 PM


"Because I love you.
That is perfection."
Excellent...James

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