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Someplace Else Entirely......duet with serenity blaze
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Someplace Else Entirely......duet with serenity blaze |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Someplace Else Entirely Grief has the weight of pressing stone each day is one more rock on plank marveling that gravity degenerates my bone It flies around each ash alone a fluid light it rolls in me around until I've found the squeeze that tear had bound is really just the right of it in places human to recognize again what always is Oh I wish I knew this face returning gaze so mockingly mirroring but half of me I note the hollows under eyes The missing is so weep and rage at first would seem that day cannot begin or night regain a moon and all the crumbled paper poems have a face and eyes I know Pleading with apology fingers--chiseled perfectly preserved by ashes of Pompeii-- I wonder how stone people breathe Where all around once was hard rock between the listening clock time takes us all and leaves cement in form of name then breathe of flower upon the ground up from mocking fingers stand and thus would turn to grace yes all of us |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Wow, this is such a powerfully wonderful collaborative effort, sweet friends, behind the stone there is ineed a breathing of its own so such a foreign life that is intangible must exist! (big hugggsssss) I love this, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Karen and Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (03-03-2003 09:50 PM).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ladies~ I will be back to read this beauty over and over again~ I can see so many 'heart-slices' in it ... I think a piece of it is surely from my own~ Tears ... and applause at the beauty of this work of art~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The missing is so weep and rage at first would seem that day cannot begin or night regain a moon and all the crumbled paper poems have a face and eyes I know Pleading with apology fingers--chiseled perfectly preserved by ashes of Pompeii-- I wonder how stone people breathe ================================== two of passions finest...and 2 of my heart poets...how can I not love this. very cool dueting me girlies. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Excellent writing, Marti and Karen......but how could it not be, with two talents such as you two? I really enjoyed reading...;loveya: Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I don't like picking and choosing my favorite verse when it comes to duets but this I loved~ The missing is so weep and rage at first would seem that day cannot begin or night regain a moon and all the crumbled paper poems have a face and eyes I know You both have so much style~ Oodles of kudos and hugs~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (03-04-2003 12:42 AM).] |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Remarkable, absolutely remarkable and so very descriptive of that particular emotion. I applaud you both, my friends.  The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie - two of the best and writing this duet. I love it, and congratulations, very well written... BC |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a pair! wonderfully done! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
oh..entirely martie... yes. that beautiful verse...sigh. I am going to show up on her doorstep one day, begging for soup... lovely lovely lady she is.... thank you Martie! |
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Phantom Poet Member
since 2003-03-03
Posts 116Arizona USA |
gee i'm speechless nice write >>phantom poet<< |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You ladies have to issue a goosebump alert... and you need to do this, again...  |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Karen and Martie, This is exceptional. Heart touching and amazing how you could take the "weight of pressing stone" and the "weep and rage" and allow this reader the sense of uplifting and release by writing what I've felt deeply, yet never expressed so fully. I think the combination of your talent is phenominal. Hope you do this again. Enjoyed a great deal, Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
bravo you two! very well done...but how could it not be with two such talents... |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I've seen stone people breathe... when the weeds forge through a crack and all by force spring life to deathly stone. love the images you created here, this is brilliant! Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thank you friends, and serenity..you are a delight to write with. Again huh?  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
A due chori.....I'm in awe of this. Now, how to do it justice myself.....? ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
martie, I am truly moved! Rf |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
due belle donne e` una bellisima poesia two beautiful women and a most beautiful poem. adding this to my library  oh and again please &  to you both. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautifully creative..much enjoyed and I'm speechless with awe. ~Hugs to you both~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now THAT is poetry ladies. Bravo! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ummmmmmm, I said I'd be back ... now how does that  thing work ?  ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
You two write so powerfully on your own and this is so grand I cannot find the words to offer other than WOW I loved it - I love all that both of you write - Paul |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
A haunting, poignant poem - good work, you two! Cor |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
The talent doubled Into perfection more perfect The sublime, more exquisite The superb, more astounding BRAVO! BRAVO! The talent doubled Liz |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
This is wonderful. Really a great duet, you both did a superb job  |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Wow...this is just too perfect for words. Absolutely beautiful...what a wonderful pair of poets. Hugs to you both, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
However did I miss this lovely blend? A "dream duet" already written Late, but loving it. Ed |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Martie? It took a lot of time for me to understand what you were saying to me at the time... How can I ever thank you? I simply can't, yanno. Lovely, lovely lady that you are. and to everybody? this is all HER wisdom--I was just grieving and pissed. SHE made it healing. |
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