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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Fading there is no stunning blast, no earthquake sudden rending severation of the soul no fall so relieving as a rockslide down a canyon wall no, it is closer more eroding than the realignment when the closest dearest friend has said “acquaintance” and more threatening than than the unease as you notice after all these years a wall is very slightly out of line more subtle than the small distress, there on the warming sand while waves break with tones of the eternal symphony, that the song has never been for you yet it yearns more personal and somehow less significant than the scrape dry turning turning of an empty tumbleweed down the drywashes of time and hollow as the understanding that although the weed is wearing stick by stick the prairie has no end [This message has been edited by Ratleader (03-03-2003 03:13 PM).] |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Wow Ed, I love the images. A very stirring write. dearest friend has said “acquaintance” and more threatening than than the unease as you notice after all these years Loved these lines especially... [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (03-03-2003 03:13 PM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...Some things that fall and break are invisible and only felt in the deepest places of the heart. You wrote a heartbreak.  |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
 Wonderful write, friend.... "Love makes the world go around" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I felt rather discombobulated and disoriented as I read this interesting post ---however, I can appreciate your artistry on the page and in your thoughts. Peace, love, & Light, EA |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Hi, EA -- funny you should mention that -- it's EXACTLY how I felt as I wrote it! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"the drywashes of time and hollow as the understanding" love how you formed this poem, making me take notice and read slower to get the effect of the tumbling down. *s M |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Presented beautifully. Joyce |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I have to say that part of this poem came from my own musings about this group. Very shortly after I joined, I learned that 500 posts was a sort of demarcation point at which you were considered a senior member. I never expected that I would last that long, and certainly wouldn't if I hadn't found friends here. I knew this poem would be Post #501 for me if I lived through the writing of it, and I spent a long time thinking about how it would have felt to just fade out, maybe not even realizing that I was leaving until I was gone..... As poems will it became something else, but that's how it started. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
more subtle than the small distress, there on the warming sand while waves break with tones of the eternal symphony, that the song has never been for you love this one Ed.... great stuff.. |
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