Dinner Table Scene (Mother Knows Best tk. 1)

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Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

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the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-03-03 02:37 PM

Out of the corner
I catch a glimpse
of her staring at me
she opens her mouth to speak
but quickly closes it
around her cup

"What is it?" I ask
lowering my fork
but of course
I already know what IT is
but for some reason
I feel the need
to play this game

Deep breath
a trick of the light?
Or do I see
a tear forming?
Voice waivers
a sure sign

"You had gold in those hands."

A clang of fork
and hands grip the table
to rage, to scream
but there's nothing
to argue
when I know she's right

Picking up the fork
take in another mouthful
and padding my lips
with my napkin
eyes to the plate
"Not anymore, pass the salt."

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (03-03-2003 03:16 PM).]

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2003-03-03 03:23 PM

I was and am very lucky...we never ate as a family, 5 kids, 2 adults...6 different schedules...

But I know that feeling. Very recently I felt the hard look through printed words, and it ruined a week of my life and I got paid off in a check, which hurt more than knowing what was really said and thought.

M

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

2 posted 2003-03-03 03:27 PM

Did the son disappoint Mother, or what?

I've seen that look a lot from my Dad's eyes.

Heart Hugs,
Ethel

Joyce Johnson

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since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2003-03-03 03:37 PM

Oh I remember these dinners and never a bad word was allowed from any of us. Mother and Daddy were very wise. Dinner was a family happy time. I'm sorry yours were different. Joyce

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2003-03-03 04:17 PM

This slice of life, if it is yours, has intrigued me. What gold did you possess in those hands that both you and your Mom feel that is not there anymore? Perhaps the gold has just changed form, and there may be stardust there now instead...

Warm hugs,
EA

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

5 posted 2003-03-03 04:23 PM

A slice of life...

well done Raph...

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

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USA

6 posted 2003-03-03 04:37 PM

enjoyed

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

7 posted 2003-03-03 10:14 PM

nakdthought I'm sorry you have to go through that, with endings come new beginnings? I wish I could offer better words of sympathy

Ethel yes and while it's true I she doesn't have to keep reminding me

Not always Joyce and thanks for reading

Linda hard to talk about, hmmm in the archives there's one of my poem's Days. explains more

Thanks Karilea

thanks vandana

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

8 posted 2003-03-04 05:10 AM

Raph - the gold is still there . . . you just arent looking hard enough - this was amazing - heartwrenching but amazing xxoo

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19

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Ohio

9 posted 2003-03-04 07:17 AM

pick up your goddamned paintbrush already.........this is another mother talking

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

10 posted 2003-03-04 07:34 AM

Aenimal
Interesting write, enjoyed.

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

11 posted 2003-03-04 09:17 AM

honest..and well told... Raph...it bleeds of family and of the things we do to them..and they to us..without knowing it..

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

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12 posted 2003-03-04 09:44 AM

Pure electricity. If you wrote prose your books would sell a million copies, but the weak would be crazy by the end of 'em.

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Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

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Georgia

13 posted 2003-03-04 11:03 AM

Very well done! I love it!

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

14 posted 2003-03-04 10:18 PM

Sue, still there? No wait thats arthritis nope no gold but thanks

Mish thanks but I'll start with something less daunting, crayons and trying to stay in the lines

thanks Sy

Cpat vicious..makes for writing fodder though

Ratleader thanks lol But i'd go crazy writing them..oh wait i already am

Many thanks Brad

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