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Slipping Away
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Slipping Away |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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Slipping Away I could slip away and not be noticed gone, except for the need to patch a tear, or wash the worn, or feed the empty. I could be non-existent to your eyes, a sheerness, even if and maybe when. I could disappear behind this smile, a sadness held beyond the surface, a heart wanting to be let in, to share. When will it reach the end, when I can't turn back and the s.o.s leaves me lost to you, drowning in my own desires, slipping away beyond reach... Perhaps it's all in my mind my eyes wanting to see you there, a mirage of want, slipping away into distortions, layering me until I am too thickly hidden behind something so complex and yet so simple... as love. M "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Maureen, Good write, enjoyed the read. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Well thank you Mr. T  I am trying to be "good" today. M |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
complex yet simple...you got that right! |
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rkcraig Member
since 2003-02-27
Posts 202Cincinnati, Ohio, USA |
I could disappear behind this smile, a sadness held beyond the surface, a heart wanting to be let in, to share. ------------------------------------- I know this feeling all to much. Love is so complex at times and it can be so simple as well. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
wow, I have written this same feeling, though...not half as well......wonderful |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Thank you passing shadows, yes I wish every thing was as simple as I felt it was when younger... rkcraig thank you for the read and time you take to respond. jellybeans, You have written many that I have enjoyed, as well if not better  Thank You M |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
"...Perhaps it's all in my mind my eyes wanting to see you there, a mirage of want, slipping away into distortions, layering me until I am too thickly hidden behind something so complex and yet so simple... as love." Amen Sunkissed."I have to hurry past the moon...to Jupiter..." [This message has been edited by Sunkissed (03-05-2003 09:42 AM).] |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
yea... complex yet so simple. So much truth there its almost frightening, this whole poem was fantastic. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Sunkissed, Thank You Alyssa, I am glad you enjoyed my thoughts that day. *s hugsssss M |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
youve penned this well, it is so complex and so simple all at once, well said |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Michele, are you following me around today I am in and out trying to rid the snow on my sidewalks...before the next storm hits tonight. 16 days ago and I still am having trouble shoveling it all off the walks..but it looks like diamonds when I break it up...I think there may be a poem in there somewhere *s thanks hugssss M |
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