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Wind
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0 posted 2003-03-02 05:09 PM



meromries half dead,
lost in the dust
photographs told past lies,
over creaking floorboards

faces stareing out that window
stole a glimpse of the moon,
storms spent waiting
in the dark

one candle had enough light,
enough for an eternity
because time stood still
in the attic

the Wind is invisible.
        remeber me

© Copyright 2003 Liz - All Rights Reserved
rkcraig
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1 posted 2003-03-02 05:20 PM


Kind of makes me want to break out the old photo albums.
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2 posted 2003-03-02 05:49 PM


Wind..hello there!   Your writing is so good for a person as young as yourself. Keep up the good work. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

Enchantress
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3 posted 2003-03-02 07:05 PM


Very nicely done sweetie.
Much enjoyed!
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Aenimal
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4 posted 2003-03-02 09:38 PM


one candle had enough light,
enough for an eternity
because time stood still
in the attic

I'd argue with nightshade that with lines like these, your writing is amazing for one of any age. Excellent work

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (03-02-2003 09:51 PM).]

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5 posted 2003-03-02 09:40 PM




(big hugggssssss) Oh Liz, yes, when something is tucked away much of its meaning and coherence is lost, and that can be eerie! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Liz, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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