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Winter lament
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Winter lament |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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So, now I begin As I do every year But sooner, this time To tire of woodchips And bark High water and cold I tire of the way My hands Shiver the words On the pages Of books The way my coffee Is savored Not, between lips But rather, between The palms of my hands The stacks of cordwood That once resembled Riches Now look as used up And tired As I "The shortest distance between two points is.....sometimes intolerable" |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Ah, time for spring. Liked the coffee lines savored between palms, and the last few about the wood pile. Enjoyed this, eloquent in it's simplistist style and honest flow. Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Great imagery. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
amen btw thanks to you and bri for turning me on to Bukowski..brilliant [This message has been edited by Aenimal (03-02-2003 11:09 AM).] |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
And as I sit here warming my hands with a cup of coffee I enjoy the words written from your pen.... yes.....I tire of winter now also and await the thaw, but sometimes the thaw seems to take way to long to arrive... I do believe you have inspired me this morning Ed, and perhaps.....just perhaps... I might write something new again..... thank you for the inspire.... Would you mind terribly if I used this inspire for a write? Thank you.... You do what you do, and you pay for your sins, and there is no such thing as what might have been... thats a waste of time... drive a man out of his mind.. (sung by Tim McGraw) [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (03-02-2003 11:05 AM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
your writing will save you, word by word chipping away at the calendar keep your axe sharp as your wit the earth spins no matter who wins mornin to ya! PS I sent you an email photo link to brighten your AM [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (03-02-2003 11:35 AM).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
perfectly, mournfully woven! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thanks Pat, For reading this....complaint Loner? Yes, plenty of chilly imagery here. Raff M'lad, Bukowski writes the way I would wish to, without the many years of booze and broken companions. Oh, Wait! (Sheesh) I'm honored Donna, that this poor scribble has inspired anything...excepting the desire to move to the Islands...Please, write whatever this has stiirred. Kacy, If a mountaintop is required for this, it'll have to be yours.(I only have a soggy bottom. *grin*) Nice image, didn't know folks still revered that symbol...Good to see. Virgnia, I won't mourn the passing of this particular winter. May it rest in peace....soon. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Well the cordwood might be all used up, but your writing is far from it wranx. (don't even go there ok) Love the little slices of life you depict. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
wranx...under the woodpile, a multitude of life remains through winter, taking cover in your work. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Wranx - I am there with you as it is -3 degrees here - ahhh yes nothing like a warm cup in your hands . . . need to get back to Kauai xxoo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
honey, I can sure relate to this one! |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
as always the picture is painted with just a few strokes of the masters pen arthur |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I just read your critique message and now I'm laughing so hard that I forgot what I was going to say... OH! heh Okay - I can completely relate to this (I moved to FL this winter to get warm!)...of course, it's funny about me how I'll gripe about being cold but look forward to the fall when it finally comes around? Enjoyed this write! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
The way my coffee Is savored Not, between lips But rather, between The palms of my hands soon, Ed. Soon...and, will send you complete instuctions for observing candlemas...  Hugs you. |
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