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Ratleader
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0 posted 2003-03-01 10:15 PM



Moonshine

distilling it takes time,
           then
           heat
       and
    then
   a
      long
           cool
               coiling
          passage
          and

   at the very last
     something to
        catch it
             in


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BluesSerenade
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1 posted 2003-03-01 11:35 PM


That is, if it's worth bottling!  
Martie
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2 posted 2003-03-01 11:45 PM


Hi Ed...I like my moonshine from the sky and my beer from grocery store.  Enjoyed the shape of the poem...could almost see the process through the form as well as words.  
Enotneicna
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3 posted 2003-03-01 11:48 PM


Ratleader.........I like the arrow shape the writing takes.......imaginative write.

Many blessings
Eno

Words are my medicine.
Read and live and love and heal!



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4 posted 2003-03-01 11:49 PM


LOL --
Moonshine

distilling it takes time,
           then
           heat
       and
    then
   a
      long
           cool
               coiling
          passage
          and

   at the very last  .
     something to     .
        catch it          .
             in              .
                             .
                             .
                          and
                       pour the bad
                    stuff on the ground
                      or it'll make you
                         sick for sure
                             .....


CSKpoet
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5 posted 2003-03-02 02:45 AM


ahhhhhh Okolehao! mmmmm wonderful for what ails ya!
clever and cute poem!
Cher

Poetry is:
Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

[This message has been edited by CSKpoet (03-02-2003 02:45 AM).]

wranx
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6 posted 2003-03-02 03:20 AM


That coily bit that formed with your words,
is known in these parts as the "worm"

A copper coil that is sometimes the only ( but crucial) part that can be spirited away, before the "revenuers" find your still.

Enjoyed this Ed

Ed

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7 posted 2003-03-02 10:27 AM


Have enjoyed a bit meself, betimes......

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