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Martie
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0 posted 2003-03-01 11:31 AM


This Minutes Captured View

Just
a piece
   of sunshine
slanted in
this door of glass
to warm the teal carpet
with streaks of window pane
and patterned leaf shadows
that danced in teasing movement

Puppy chase phantom foliage
in vaulted joyful game
before a cloud killed her prey
the sway for tiny dog
to drowned in all that light
and lay full out with body splayed
mild and devoid of scamper
and smiling slide her eyes
beneath her paw and droop of ear

Then from the feeder
with wings accelerated
a mid air knight
with trusty spear
frenzy     fortified
      while
Just
a piece
   of sunshine
slanted in
this door of glass
to warm the teal carpet
and its Precious sun-drenched warrior
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[This message has been edited by Martie (03-01-2003 11:59 AM).]

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1 posted 2003-03-01 11:55 AM


This is so cute. My little dog used to like to play with the sunlight rays and his shadow, too. Now he has a new toy he'd rather play with....a little live cat. She likes to play with him, too They're so cute. You can ask him where is his new toy and he looks for her....

Hugs,
Ehel

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2 posted 2003-03-01 11:55 AM


I would love a piece of sunshine right now *s and the warmth that accompanies it

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3 posted 2003-03-01 11:56 AM



Huge grins....
and warmed heart...

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4 posted 2003-03-01 12:38 PM


Martie,
Well that was a beautiful flight.

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5 posted 2003-03-01 12:42 PM


This gives me the visual of sitting back with a cuppa just relaxing for that all to infrequent half a sec. I don't often get the strong visuals like that. Nicely done.
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6 posted 2003-03-01 02:02 PM


very well written Martie! as always
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7 posted 2003-03-01 02:21 PM




(giggles in delight) Oh Martie, this is sooooooo cute, sweet friend, I love puppies and kittys, one time when I was a little boy I had a kitty and one morning my kitty was in the sunshine near my bed and I gave her a yarn ball and seeing her roll around with it in the light made me smile and giggle! (kiss on cheek) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, yay, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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8 posted 2003-03-01 05:22 PM


enjoyed
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9 posted 2003-03-01 05:37 PM


Martie,
you will be remembered, for the depth in which you capture moments of the everyday, that make up life.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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10 posted 2003-03-01 11:40 PM


Cute little puppy dog in the window
and all the comforts of home!  

Good one Martie~

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11 posted 2003-03-02 06:00 PM


You make me want to be there, share that moment and its small but priceless meaning.

Your poetry is so inviting that the reader just has to go along for the ride. Has to.

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12 posted 2003-03-02 08:05 PM


enjoyed
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Awesome imagery - you just get better & better, Martie!

You should submit this one for the book!


Cor

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14 posted 2003-03-02 10:01 PM


This is precious Martie. hugs, Chris

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that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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awwww makes me wanna go out and buy a puppy..... but dont think the kitty would like it...   Sweet write....very peaceful to read....


Lauren~

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So I can pull you into me

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16 posted 2003-03-03 10:21 AM


Martie - loved this as usual - your writing just writes scene after scene on my mind - Paul
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17 posted 2003-03-04 11:15 AM


I knew I'd enjoy any view captured in your eyes and heart. *S* This is wonderful! *S*
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