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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2003-03-01 02:30 AM



the pressure builds
the force of none
pounding seconds
on the run, are thoughts in cycles
in constraint
twisting turns, no sleep to paint
my dreams in need
to color world
these seconds linger
hours swirled, until I'm forced
in dark of pain, duress
in stressful rise again
with shoulders ache
and eyes feel weight
blurred in visions, second take
each moment draws,
an impasse locked, helter skelter
ticks the clock
am wide awake in want of sleep
counting poundings
'stead of sheep, words I'm zzzzing
sawing done
repeating pressure
tortures
one...

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

© Copyright 2003 Wynter Bliss - All Rights Reserved
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Saluting with misty eyes
1 posted 2003-03-01 02:32 AM


Completely understood.
Very good writing

nakdthoughts
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2 posted 2003-03-01 02:37 AM


ahh another Pennsylvanian  *s
thanks
M

rkcraig
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3 posted 2003-03-01 03:11 AM


I wish I could sleep now!
passing shadows
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displaced
4 posted 2003-03-01 03:21 AM


well you know me, I'm a night owl...and I spend my time here.
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Lost in thought
5 posted 2003-03-01 07:51 AM


its 4:50 AM here...too late to take more sleeping meds... I understand you all too well, and hope you're asleep by now.
Enjoyed this.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 2003-03-01 08:02 AM


I hear the sounds of back and forth sawing in the rhythm of the verse. Very well done, whether intentional or not, I cling to the rhythm of a verse
Also, I liked the imaginative theme
Liz

nakdthoughts
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7 posted 2003-03-01 08:50 AM


...was a migraine night until about two hours ago.

It's probably still there, just excedrined to death

thanks for replying, I haven't been up that late to write in ages, but sitting up was the only way to get rid of the headache early this morning or late last night.

M

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8 posted 2003-03-01 10:53 AM


This is so lyrical.
Great poem!
Eric

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9 posted 2003-03-01 11:06 AM


My time is 3 AM. You did this feeling justice.
Sandra

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10 posted 2003-03-01 12:01 PM


Maureen, I've had many of those nights lately. It's hard to sleep when you're coughing your head off.......or when your head feels like it's about to explode, too.....

Hope you sleep better tonight...

Hugs,
Ethel

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11 posted 2003-03-01 09:12 PM


Maureen, I know how you feel. Even when I go to bed I don't sleep. I just toss and turn all night.
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12 posted 2003-03-01 11:59 PM


Maureen~ I know what you mean. I get mine in about 30 minutes at a time every 2-3 hours...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
13 posted 2003-03-05 07:09 AM


I don't want you to think I have  forgotten all those who have responded. Thank you. There are days when the weather changes and my head begins to disown me...*s

Cursed, I am, with my own internal barometer.

Phantom Poet
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14 posted 2003-03-06 07:40 PM


Enjoyed your write!! and thoughts!!
         >>phantom poet<<

inkedgoddess
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15 posted 2003-03-06 10:47 PM



liked the flow of the poem, felt like i was
being taken for a ride on the road of tossing and turning, one ride i'd rather exchange for a different middle of the night adventure,if you catch my drift

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