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0 posted 2003-03-01 12:56 PM



Waiting While She Shops

Waiting while
she shops
I see her at
the other end,
coming along
the store aisle,
packages in
both arms.

She sways
a little as
she walks,
breaks into
a tiny smile,
happy with
what she’s
found.

I’ll help
when she
gets closer;
but for now
I’m happy
just to wait,
to see her
as I see her
always,
coming down
the aisle.

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1 posted 2003-03-01 01:02 AM


Mmmm...very nice, especially the reference to the wedding aisle in the last line.

That's what we, as heroes, do. We live as if the world were like it should be, to show the world what it could be.

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2 posted 2003-03-01 01:04 AM


Yep, that's what I saw, not thirty minutes ago.....

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3 posted 2003-03-01 01:10 AM


Lucky man. *wishes for her own love*

That's what we, as heroes, do. We live as if the world were like it should be, to show the world what it could be.

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4 posted 2003-03-01 01:25 AM


ya mean that not all men hate waiting while the women shop??

LOL

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5 posted 2003-03-01 01:28 AM


Really, I was rather surprised myself! I'm also tired. Bedtime for Amara, me thinks.

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6 posted 2003-03-01 01:39 AM


Well..... I didn't exactly say anything about not hating, did I.......

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7 posted 2003-03-01 01:48 AM


LOL awww come on....say it!!!

actually, I'm not too big into shopping...so I'm in the clear here....

but you made it sound interesting :-)~

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8 posted 2003-03-01 01:58 AM


It was VERY interesting for me, and not just because I was hanging around the lingere department.....

I got hot headed, pulled out a pen and paper, and wrote six (count 'em, six) poems while I stood there! Never did that before, ever!

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9 posted 2003-03-01 04:19 AM


neat write
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10 posted 2003-03-01 10:45 AM


Ed...Sweet, those moments.  Enjoyed this one myself.  
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