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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2003-02-28 04:50 AM


five hairs auburn
curling in
the weight of me--
wishing I could toss a disc.

little slivers of the blonde--
watch me--from the point of this--
exceptional
of India--
cotton cut with strands of silk--
assurance of the rough rawness.
(yes I'll take this bundle-bliss)

spices lure
I bite the end
of a cuban
in wide brim--
popping lower jaw  
I grin--
and grant my brother rings...

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (02-28-2003 04:55 AM).]

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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2003-02-28 06:20 AM



I sense a deeply personal message here,
Serenity...all I can say is it makes me
want to wish him well...


and pray God keeps him safe...

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2003-02-28 09:48 AM


little slivers of the blonde--
watch me--from the point of this--
exceptional
of India--
cotton cut with strands of silk--
assurance of the rough rawness.
(yes I'll take this bundle-bliss)
==================================

you grant so much more that "rings" ....
your poetry flies baby...and makes me moth high.

Where the touch of lovers end and the soul of friends begin,
there's a need to be separate and a need to be one ...
it's struggle neither wins.


Brad Majors
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Georgia
3 posted 2003-02-28 11:08 AM


This poem really draws you in
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
4 posted 2003-02-28 11:12 AM


serenity,
That was quite a flight, enjoyed.

passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2003-02-28 01:06 PM


as always...I enjoyed
Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
6 posted 2003-02-28 01:45 PM


Those rings of smoke went straight to heaven...

Blessings to you both,
EA

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
7 posted 2003-02-28 03:38 PM


I think you may be in need of a few hugs


not that I understand everything you are feeling, but there is a hint in there, a little sliver...


M

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