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Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 2003-02-26 11:26 PM

With tattered clothes
and vacant eyes,
he sat alone
beneath
grey skies
amid the pigeons
in the park
on a wooden bench
til
day turned dark,
a furrowed brow
and
greying beard,
upon his cheek
a dry tear smeared;
darkness fell
upon the park,
he was no more,
he'd disappeared.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2003-02-27 12:31 PM

Beneath shaded trees
and summers passed
dressed in despair
seen clear through
she sat alone
to cry her eyes
pondering
her altered state
she brushed her hair
fine lines to trace
and felt him there
too little too late
to turned a curl
and hold her face
a look beyond the shadowed grey
and stage a tear in dark disgrace
tokens left to slip away
stained upon the bench.

I really liked your poem in the park
and the inspiration I found in it.

Thanks~

Songbird
Member Elite

since 1999-12-15

Posts 2184
Missouri

2 posted 2003-02-27 01:13 AM

This certainly is a topic one could write alot about..I wonder everytime I see a homeless person, the story behind their homelessness.

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

3 posted 2003-02-27 01:36 AM

An excellent write, Tim.
This touched my heart.
Hugs,
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2003-02-27 01:27 PM

Thank you, Sir....

Thomas119gold
Senior Member

since 2002-06-03

Posts 708
Biloxi, MS (city by the sea)

5 posted 2003-02-27 01:32 PM

Nice write enjoyed it

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

6 posted 2003-02-27 01:32 PM

Tim
Good thoughts, good write, good read.

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

7 posted 2003-02-27 02:00 PM

Tim - well done! I can see this in my mind's eye. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2003-02-27 02:23 PM

Tim...You took a picture and shared it well...this reminds me of a poem I wrote some time ago...I'll email it to you. Hope you are doing okay with all that snow.

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

9 posted 2003-02-27 03:17 PM

Writing seems familiar, somehow.

Liked it a lot, though sad.

Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Fred Hobbs
Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 329
Tallahassee, Florida, US

10 posted 2003-02-27 03:19 PM

Well done Tim, I really like this one

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

11 posted 2003-02-27 08:25 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Tim, this is sad but well-written, sweet friend, it saddens me to see many truly feel this way and I give them hugs to light their ghostly hearts! (sad sigh) This is well-expressed, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tim, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

12 posted 2003-02-28 04:38 AM

touching and sad

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