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Sadie's Song (Inspired by Robert Smith)

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Aenimal
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0 posted 02-26-2003 10:31 PM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Aenimal

Angel lips hide devil tongue
ancient eyes of one so young
Threads the needle through the vein
Sadie's fallen down again

Empty stares into the sky
she wants to know the reasons why
Clouds have chased the blue away
and left her in a blanket grey


Cry Cry Cry
When there's nothing left to say or do
Sigh Sigh Sigh
until the hiding sun finds its way thru


Mother never told poor Sadie
there'd be days like these
Days that tear a soul away
and bring her to her knees

Father never did say
much of anything at all
Never noticed daddy's angel
clip her wings and fall

Cry Cry Cry
When there's nothing left to say or do
Sigh Sigh Sigh
until the hiding sun find its way thru

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I've had the Cure's In Between Days in my head for days since hearing it and this came out of it. I'm not sure I even like it I just figured I'd post to keep me from erasing it all together..

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (02-26-2003 10:33 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 raphael giuffrida - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 02-26-2003 10:33 PM       View Profile for the_loner_23   Email the_loner_23   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_loner_23

I really liked this a lot.

Cold hands means a warm heart

BluesSerenade
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2 posted 02-26-2003 10:40 PM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

So many questions without answers.

Lifes a beautiful beach ain't it?

I liked the way you wrote this Raph!
Aenimal
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3 posted 02-26-2003 10:43 PM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aenimal

thanks loner

Blues you said beach? Cause i would argue it's a similar sounding word thanks for the read
Justbleu
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4 posted 03-04-2003 06:16 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

I liked this.....

Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Andre Brink

GG
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5 posted 03-04-2003 07:28 PM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GG

I like the rhythm and words.
great write.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

garysgirl
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6 posted 03-04-2003 07:34 PM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Hey, Raph  

I don't know why you didn't like this one. I think it's one of your best. I enjoyed reading it...

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~  
                  

Jason Lyle
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7 posted 03-04-2003 07:45 PM       View Profile for Jason Lyle   Email Jason Lyle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jason Lyle

I'm almost afraid to reply, I guess maybe I should start your fan club.
Jason

[This message has been edited by Jason Lyle (03-04-2003 08:01 PM).]

carol
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8 posted 03-04-2003 08:33 PM       View Profile for carol   Email carol   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit carol's Home Page   View IP for carol

Raph,This poem is really nice

Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become
Lots of Love
Rita

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9 posted 03-04-2003 09:28 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I think it has potential, Ralph
Wind
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10 posted 03-04-2003 09:32 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

Well I enjoyed it!

the Wind is invisible.
        remeber me

Aenimal
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11 posted 03-04-2003 10:04 PM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aenimal

Justbleu thanks, always nice to see a piece which i thought tanked resurface lol

Thanks ALyssa glad you do

Ethel you know me, I like the darker ones but sweet of yu to say

Jason your replies are too much thanks I really appreciate them

Carol so are you thanks for the response

Thanks deer nice to see you back in the swing of things too!

Thanks Wind!

littlewing
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12 posted 03-05-2003 02:01 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Raph - Im listening to it now - in between days - story of my life - I do understand - and if you would have erased this I would have tanned your hide - its amazing - as always -
" . . . Never noticed daddy's angel
clip her wings and fall . . "

I started that Father Forgive Me one like that " No one ever told me  . . . "
Excellent - xxoo

Susan Caldwell
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13 posted 03-05-2003 08:35 AM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

Raph,

I am very glad you didn't erase!  I loved this.

Susan
Aenimal
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14 posted 03-05-2003 12:35 PM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aenimal

Thanks Sue and Susan..my we have alot of Sues on this board
Ceinwyn
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15 posted 03-06-2003 02:50 PM       View Profile for Ceinwyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ceinwyn

this is the closest I can get to jaw dropping to the floor..errr..I'm seriously not good at this comment thing but I really did like this..I think I'm fast becoming a fan *shrugs* just something about the way you structure your thoughts..loved it...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Poet deVine
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16 posted 03-06-2003 02:52 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

You have a perspective that few  have. I enjoy reading you Raph!
Ratleader
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17 posted 03-06-2003 03:08 PM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

Hated this poem the first time through -- then said "Wait a min, Rat, this is Aenimal and he don't make no junk..."

Read a second time with BOTH eyes, and sure enough it got to me like your stuff always does....(makes mental note -- when you read a serious poet, read seriously -- this is NOT a greeting card)....

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Aenimal
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18 posted 03-06-2003 03:40 PM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aenimal

Ceinwyn very sweet of you to say thanks

thanks Sharon appreciate it hope to see you soon

Ratleader I'm still not sure i like it to tell you the truth, i hate rhyme personally just came to me..

Susan Caldwell
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19 posted 11-25-2005 01:49 PM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

I still love this one....

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

 
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