Sadie's Song (Inspired by Robert Smith)

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Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

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the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-02-26 10:31 PM

Angel lips hide devil tongue
ancient eyes of one so young
Threads the needle through the vein
Sadie's fallen down again

Empty stares into the sky
she wants to know the reasons why
Clouds have chased the blue away
and left her in a blanket grey

Cry Cry Cry
When there's nothing left to say or do
Sigh Sigh Sigh
until the hiding sun finds its way thru

Mother never told poor Sadie
there'd be days like these
Days that tear a soul away
and bring her to her knees

Father never did say
much of anything at all
Never noticed daddy's angel
clip her wings and fall

Cry Cry Cry
When there's nothing left to say or do
Sigh Sigh Sigh
until the hiding sun find its way thru

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I've had the Cure's In Between Days in my head for days since hearing it and this came out of it. I'm not sure I even like it I just figured I'd post to keep me from erasing it all together..

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (02-26-2003 10:33 PM).]

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-02-26 10:33 PM

I really liked this a lot.

Cold hands means a warm heart

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2003-02-26 10:40 PM

So many questions without answers.

Lifes a beautiful beach ain't it?

I liked the way you wrote this Raph!

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

3 posted 2003-02-26 10:43 PM

thanks loner

Blues you said beach? Cause i would argue it's a similar sounding word

thanks for the read

Justbleu
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since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

4 posted 2003-03-04 06:16 PM

I liked this.....

Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Andre Brink

GG
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

5 posted 2003-03-04 07:28 PM

I like the rhythm and words.
great write.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2003-03-04 07:34 PM

Hey, Raph

I don't know why you didn't like this one. I think it's one of your best. I enjoyed reading it...

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~

Jason Lyle
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since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

7 posted 2003-03-04 07:45 PM

I'm almost afraid to reply, I guess maybe I should start your fan club.
Jason

[This message has been edited by Jason Lyle (03-04-2003 08:01 PM).]

carol
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since 2003-01-25

Posts 624
Florida USA

8 posted 2003-03-04 08:33 PM

Raph,This poem is really nice

Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become
Lots of Love
Rita

Balladeer

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9 posted 2003-03-04 09:28 PM

I think it has potential, Ralph

Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

10 posted 2003-03-04 09:32 PM

Well I enjoyed it!

the Wind is invisible.
remeber me

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

11 posted 2003-03-04 10:04 PM

Justbleu thanks, always nice to see a piece which i thought tanked resurface lol

Thanks ALyssa glad you do

Ethel you know me, I like the darker ones but sweet of yu to say

Jason your replies are too much thanks I really appreciate them

Carol so are you thanks for the response

Thanks deer nice to see you back in the swing of things too!

Thanks Wind!

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

12 posted 2003-03-05 02:01 AM

Raph - Im listening to it now - in between days - story of my life - I do understand - and if you would have erased this I would have tanned your hide - its amazing - as always -
" . . . Never noticed daddy's angel
clip her wings and fall . . "

I started that Father Forgive Me one like that " No one ever told me . . . "
Excellent - xxoo

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

13 posted 2003-03-05 08:35 AM

Raph,

I am very glad you didn't erase! I loved this.

Susan

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

14 posted 2003-03-05 12:35 PM

Thanks Sue and Susan..my we have alot of Sues on this board

Ceinwyn
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VA

15 posted 2003-03-06 02:50 PM

this is the closest I can get to jaw dropping to the floor..errr..I'm seriously not good at this comment thing but I really did like this..I think I'm fast becoming a fan *shrugs* just something about the way you structure your thoughts..loved it...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

16 posted 2003-03-06 02:52 PM

You have a perspective that few have. I enjoy reading you Raph!

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

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Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

17 posted 2003-03-06 03:08 PM

Hated this poem the first time through -- then said "Wait a min, Rat, this is Aenimal and he don't make no junk..."

Read a second time with BOTH eyes, and sure enough it got to me like your stuff always does....(makes mental note -- when you read a serious poet, read seriously -- this is NOT a greeting card)....

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Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

18 posted 2003-03-06 03:40 PM

Ceinwyn very sweet of you to say thanks

thanks Sharon appreciate it hope to see you soon

Ratleader I'm still not sure i like it to tell you the truth, i hate rhyme personally just came to me..

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

19 posted 2005-11-25 01:49 PM

I still love this one....

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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