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Water Down |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Water Down Tear up the sky baby pour the water down the sound is falling hear its feet trace my map into the slide of mud wrapped in hard down rock oh rock me with the music of your liquid breath dimple darling the street with rivers filling up into the dark delivery comes from your potent mouth as it crumbles the blush of dusk with stakes that jam the horizon down into the cinnabar crack of tomorrow Don’t whisper it’s too late and I have yearned for sound of tin drums to make music like your hands in my mind feed me baby with you patter I’m starved and rocking in a boat made of splinters ‘til I drown [This message has been edited by Martie (02-26-2003 05:55 PM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Wow! It's always a ride, to read one of yours! This one so fun and offbeat and serious at the same time......just brilliant. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Don't know about brilliant, Ed, but I get really uplifted by a storm...feels like growing after being dorment for a long time, if that makes any sense...and thanks. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
makes sense Martie... and the poem..makes music... |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome write Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
"with stakes that jam the horizon" Oh, ya! I love a storm. Love the power of it! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Makes PERFECT sense to me, Martie.  It's been raining here for a couple of days now, and I'm absolutely LOVING it! The rain is VERY good for me. Love this, Martie. Hugs to you...  "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Sweet Martie...this piece literally dances down the page! Beautiful...exciting...love it..a keeper! ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Tear up the sky baby pour the water down the sound is falling hear its feet trace my map into the slide of mud wrapped in hard down rock oh rock me with the music of your liquid breath dimple darling the street with rivers filling up into the dark delivery comes from your potent mouth as it crumbles the blush of dusk with stakes that jam the horizon down into the cinnabar crack of tomorrow ======================================== ROCK ME ON THE WATER!!!!!!!!!! YOU ARE SOOOOOOOOOO COOOOOOOL~~~~ this is the cooolest poem...dang I love the way you do what you do!! RAIN SOME MORE POETRY ON US BABY!!   Where the touch of lovers end and the soul of friends begin, |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
You rained a great one on us Martie - I found myself dancing with the rain - loved it - Paul |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think I need to ask, send me the links when you write... I fear I will not breathe if I miss anything... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh Martie, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, this poem bounced around softly and made me feel like I was sailing away on the ocean! (kiss on cheek) This is lovely, sweet friend, yay, you truly set us afloat with your muse, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
You stold my heart right at the start.... " Tear up the sky baby pour the water down the sound is falling hear its feet trace my map into the slide of mud wrapped in hard down rock oh rock me with the music of your liquid breath" |
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