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0 posted 2003-02-25 08:14 PM





~simple abundance
blessings brushed aside in haste
lives too rushed to care
seasons gifting us for free
nature's bounty gone unseen~


Chris Barker
2003
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© Copyright 2003 Chris Barker - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-02-25 08:16 PM


Very good, Chris!
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2 posted 2003-02-25 08:27 PM


Very nicely done Chris.
Tanka very much!
~Hugs and love ya, Teed~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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3 posted 2003-02-25 08:28 PM



Do you have any idea
how proud I am of you?

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4 posted 2003-02-25 08:33 PM


Sue - thankyou dear lady for commenting.

Nancylee - lol. How's your pipes? lol. Thankyou dear sister of mine - hugs.

Karilea - Ya mean I done good? Yippee! My head was aching from all the studying I have done to-day. Thankyou so much. hugs!

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5 posted 2003-02-25 09:38 PM


Hey!!  What's this doing down here?
Upsadaisy!

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6 posted 2003-02-25 09:43 PM


I'm not gonna .....no I won't....no way....oh no... ....I tried so hard...I feel like I am back in school!! lol..oh, it's fun anyway!! Thanks Teed.
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7 posted 2003-02-25 10:02 PM



Chris,

This is wonderful. From title, you carried the theme throughout.

Really like this.


Hugs, Pat

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        "Desiderata"

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8 posted 2003-02-25 10:03 PM


Hi Pat! I really appreciate your kind comments.

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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9 posted 2003-02-25 10:44 PM


I hope you realize that I will be expecting more of these from you.  You have set a very high bar for yourself.  Well done.

INclan

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10 posted 2003-02-25 10:49 PM


INclan - oh, oh,....what have I gotten myself into? This is my very first Tanka & I thankyou for enjoying it.

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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11 posted 2003-02-26 03:31 AM


nice!
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12 posted 2003-02-26 09:48 AM


passingshadows - I thankyou for reading and commenting.

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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13 posted 2003-02-26 11:00 AM


Chris, your first attempt is incredible. Great job -- I loved every single word and combined there's a wonderful message.

Hugs, Marti

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contributes to its power.   
Shirley MacLaine

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14 posted 2003-02-26 11:29 AM


Chris, this is very good!

Rf

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15 posted 2003-02-26 11:44 AM


Marti - thankyou so much for liking this first attempt at a Tanka. hugs!

Robert - glad you enjoyed.

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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16 posted 2003-02-26 12:02 PM


Thankya for the tanka!
You are one who truly appreciates the beauty of nature and its bounty---and you share your views so poetically.

Have a wonderful day, Chris!
Linda

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17 posted 2003-02-26 12:44 PM




(smiles) Oh Chris, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, you always make me smile with your appreciation of nature as you truly are a bumblebee and butterfly to all our hearts of friendship! (kiss on cheek) This is beautiful, swet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Chris, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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18 posted 2003-02-26 01:24 PM


Linda - thankyou dear poetess.

Noah sweet friend, thankyou.

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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19 posted 2003-02-26 07:03 PM


enjoyed
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20 posted 2003-02-26 07:13 PM


Thankyou vandana!

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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