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Lament Not My Passing
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Lament Not My Passing |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I have shut my ears to you And will no longer listen To the doubts and fears you whisper In each and every hour of breathing So… Break Bleed Cease I care not If I allowed your words To infect me I would flash in ignite Of fever and then delirious Would languish So I will not hear you,heart, Murmur the idea of love With all its requisite pain Anguish and failings I will shiver here In these layers Rather than have you Guide me someplace Warmer. Stop your pounding In my chest, Turn us both to ash That we might then Be scattered In mingle on the wind Perhaps then Perhaps when I am no more I can allow myself To listen, To know, Love again. |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
yeah, *sigh*, that Ron, once again you've spoken my feelings for the day...one of em' anyway |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Perhaps when I am no more I can allow myself To listen, To know, Love again. ~*~ a casing, in want of fill... yikes... I would ask you to do this again, but I fear I would read a blank page... you are SO good... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
To tell you which part is best I'd have to quote entire poem to not lose it's essence.... BUT, I do especially like this part: "If I allowed your words To infect me I would flash in ignite Of fever and then delirious Would languish So I will not hear you, heart, Murmur the idea of love" And, there is this line: "In mingle on the wind" I stand in awe at your talent of using words so economically, yet producing such richness...so satisfying... This made me teary eyed, it is heart touching. Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (02-25-2003 12:10 PM).] |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
If I allowed your words To infect me I would flash in ignite Of fever and then delirious Would languish ~*~ sometimes, the heart is a cruel mistress... |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Awww... Now see? I'm all teary eyed.  Sunkissed. "I have to hurry past the moon...to Jupiter..." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
So I will not hear you,heart, Murmur the idea of love With all its requisite pain Anguish and failings I will shiver here In these layers Rather than have you Guide me someplace Warmer. Stop your pounding In my chest, Turn us both to ash That we might then Be scattered In mingle on the wind =================================== Your last several posts on this theme are just pure heart and gut poetry.... Youre writing from a depth below sea level ... youre writing from heights where the air thins.... when you write like this...it leaves the reader both holding their breath and inhaling your every word at the same time. Where the touch of lovers end and the soul of friends begin, |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Melancholia at perfection, to say more would be an even greater departure from the power of this piece. My tongue is "weak-kneed," my fingers "knotted," my synapses in synaptic pause. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) I like the way Janet put this; you can speak so deeply yet the pain too can feel so far up in elevation where the oxygen is lacking and we can feel the pain of the words spoken like frostbite! (sad sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, here's many healing hugs to you today, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Ron, sounds like running to a safe place - but sometimes safety is its own prison. Core |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I've said this to myself before. My resolve always lasts until I meet the next person. smiling... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
When all the superlatives have been used... May I just say a simple...'thank you Captain'. ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Like Karen, I have told myself this, too.....now look where I am again.....I still worry about my feelings, sometimes....  Hugs, Ethel |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'I will shiver here In these layers Rather than have you Guide me someplace Warmer.' Cheers buddy. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
once again, I am sitting with my mouth hanging open |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
deep an moving!...feeling compelled to say more but less is better. Rf |
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