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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2003-02-24 05:52 PM

You see,
It is not this season
That hangs interminably on to
Frigid winds that are shadows
Of faded sunlight,
Nor the blankets cold lain down
For us to try and find a source
Of warmth in their beauty of
Patch worked shades

I do not blame Winter

It is the fire inside
That wanes
with a pain that squeezes
Each breath
and leaves one
Exhaled in thin fog
To freeze
As mist on
Someone’s memories

Do please me
If you can,
And worry not about sheltering
Me from the cut of wind
But think of me in kindness
After last embers and I
Are ash.

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

1 posted 2003-02-24 06:23 PM

"To freeze
As mist
On someone's memories"

An excellent line, wish I'd come up with it.

The stars will shine when I am gone,
the earth will turn on as before,
the gulls, still race along the shore,
the morning star, still kiss the dawn

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2003-02-24 06:27 PM

What an amazing talent you are!
You never cease to leave me breathless.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2003-02-24 06:33 PM

Ron...This poem makes me want to shelter you.

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

4 posted 2003-02-24 06:39 PM

"Frigid winds that are shadows
Of faded sunlight"

This line struck a chord with me...well done,Ron...may the embers of your creativeness burn long and passionately

believe in what your heart feels...

kayjay
Member Elite

since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

5 posted 2003-02-24 06:46 PM

But think of me in kindness
After last embers and I
Are ash.

I think of you kindly now, for telling us so well the scenes you see.

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Albert J. Allie
Senior Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 512
Queens NY

6 posted 2003-02-24 07:14 PM

There is magic in your pen!

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

7 posted 2003-02-24 08:15 PM

Yes, you do have a magical way of creating many images/ideas....

Know what I liked?

"patch worked shades",

in addition to this almost grim, quite sad poem....

I'm with Martie, Warm Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2003-02-24 08:33 PM

(big hugggssssss) Oh Ron, I too think every one of us should have that kind of request, to hold onto everything and not have it become dust too! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

9 posted 2003-02-24 08:48 PM

As the temps dip toward zero,
I see one ember remaining...

if I blow softly...

and add kindling...

I wonder if I shall see a spark...?

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

10 posted 2003-02-25 12:09 PM

Do please me
If you can,
And worry not about sheltering
Me from the cut of wind
But think of me in kindness
After last embers and I
Are ash.
==============================

Me thinks we have had too much mid-west winter Capt...we need a vacation.
You thinking what Im thinking?
yeppers....I hear the waves calling.

On a day that holds winter too tightly
and frigid winds frost her words ...
she whispers across the distance
calling to the warm sand reverie that
holds her heart in tide taken requite.

Where the touch of lovers end and the soul of friends begin,
there's a need to be separate and a need to be one ...
it's struggle neither wins.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

11 posted 2003-02-25 01:07 AM

Such a wonderful way you have with
words, Capt. Ron. You put them all
in just the right places, making
your readers beg for more. We could
never get enough of your words, friend....

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

12 posted 2003-02-25 04:15 AM

I only wish I could write so well

KristieSue

Senior Member

since 2003-01-31

Posts 1460
PA, US

13 posted 2003-02-25 06:38 AM

Given my mood, I feel like crying. Beautiful job Ron.... :-)

Shadowy one....you CAN.

HUGGLES

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

14 posted 2003-02-25 08:48 AM

Aw shucks, dude.
This seems written from my own mind. One that I may have gotten around to, but now don't have to.

Thanks for doin' the heavy work.

Ed

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

15 posted 2003-02-25 09:42 AM

Another excellent "Ron-thing."

And this stanza is priceless:

It is the fire inside
                        That wanes
                        with a pain that squeezes
                        Each breath
                        and leaves one
                        Exhaled in thin fog
                        To freeze
                        As mist on
                        Someone’s memories

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

16 posted 2003-02-25 01:57 PM

Wow! *S* You've woven a captivating wordspell with this beauty, Cap'n... I kept trying to choose my favorite parts and the final decision is: all. *S*

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