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aries_luv_ppl
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0 posted 2003-02-24 02:04 PM


Slothful Morning

Waking up at sunrise,
Yearning for tea scent,
I lay my head
Beside my infancy toys.

Slothfully I breathe in
Then exhale in exhaustion-
Today I'm trapped sleepily
Within my own bed.

©Feb 23, 2003

Here were the rules:
1. Only 4 words per line,
2. Has to be at LEAST 8 lines.
3. Cant use letters: A, Z, D, and C.
4. Cant use words: Dead, The, Cant, and See.
5. Must not be funny, and must make sense.

Did I do it right?


~Every girl has a dream within.

[This message has been edited by aries_luv_ppl (02-25-2003 01:50 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-02-25 02:08 AM


Well I sure liked it, but I think you used the letters you were not supposed to but you sure did a great poem just the same.

          
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2 posted 2003-02-25 03:11 AM


pretty darn good to me!
aries_luv_ppl
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3 posted 2003-02-25 01:51 PM


thanks for correcting my errors.

~Every girl has a dream within.

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