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no curtain call |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Where is my magick bag of flash-- it's time to grease the lips of clown. Avert the eyes that seek concern. Procession of the grave's tap dance. I slip the scissors in the fold of this spinning patchwork skirt. I am but the marionette intention's veils are carved in wood. I will dance yet one more day-- but no more fortunes will be told. I've bled the snake of all his oil-- this road no longer sparks allure. I will cut these strings myself, even as I fear the fall. I've hit the ground before, you know. I proudly boast a brushburn's scar. Drop the curtain on this stage-- I will not bother to return to take a bow on center mark-- save roses for the gypsy's grave. And should there be some puzzlement-- No this is no trap door trick. Tell them all that I went home. To plant a garden by my door. Tell them that the show is done. The gypsy will not dance for coin. * * * (please note that I am aware there may be some confusion as to my choice(s) of metaphor. This is a poem about CHOICES made to direct one's LIFE. smile--didn't come this far to do m'self in, thank you much.) [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (02-24-2003 03:20 AM).] |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
This was a very interesting piece, I liked the idea of the stage, very shakespearean, good work |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yes, Karen, you are a very good writer. You have an amazing way with words......  . . By the way, the thought never crossed my mind that you had any thought whatsoever of "doing yourself in".....LOL Our little Serenity Witchey is having too much fun in life to do that.......  Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
Yeppers, liked this one... (taking notes) |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I love your style and panache as well as your interesting use of words and metaphors. There's an intelligence that comes shining through all your writing--that is probably why I often have to read your poems twice--to make sure I understand what you are trying to say! lol Warm morning hugs, Linda |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
to plant a garden by the door tomatoes..........herbs... that would be 4 knees dirty you know  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
excellent k what else could i say? |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
do I like this one? .....well my choice is to say YES I do!! Charisma |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I cut my puppet strings long ago and brother this is a good write Karen, absolutely awesome. Had to take it to the "den" to read a couple more times. |
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Thomas119gold Senior Member
since 2002-06-03
Posts 708Biloxi, MS (city by the sea) |
Handful of choices? I enjoy your poems so much I have not read them in some time this one reminds me I should for I will miss to many beautiful writes if I don't Thomas aka: Rogue |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh Karen, yes, you are no marionette, you are REAL, and therefore you are free to follow your heart and your sanctuary is not Gepetto's Workshop but your heart! (kiss on cheek) I love this, sweet friend, you rock, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, You move and groove pretty good to me.  |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
I just love this. And, grinning at your comments. And, no matter where or what kind of garden planted, I am sure it will thrive. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
serenity - dance gypsy dance! There is no need for audience or payment....just twirl those colourful skirts and listen to the tinkle of your bracelets. Great write once again. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I think this deserves and encore... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I am but the marionette intention's veils are carved in wood. I will dance yet one more day-- but no more fortunes will be told. I've bled the snake of all his oil-- this road no longer sparks allure. I will cut these strings myself, even as I fear the fall. I've hit the ground before, you know. I proudly boast a brushburn's scar. Drop the curtain on this stage-- I will not bother to return to take a bow on center mark-- save roses for the gypsy's grave. =================================== The gypsy will not dance for coin. ================================ But I would pay to read your poetry... I am but the marionette intention's veils are carved in wood. this is cooler than I have words for m'twin twin...love they way you write baby. oouuu eeee oouu ah ah ting tang walla walla bing bang ... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
mmmmmmmmmmmmm.... y'ever sleep so well and so long y'just wake up saying "mmmmmmm"... it's a rare occasion for me folks... Thank you all for reading, and yep--the gypsy skirt is off--  and I'm looking longingly at my couch and remote control...Hugs all. Hmmm...I'll be back.  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I proudly boast a brushburn's scar. ~*~ Interesting pattern...this scar... hugs you! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
serenity.........You rock any stage, especially the one at your own front door.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow...I got here kinda late in the posting but I echo all of the above replies! Awesome piece! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I will cut these strings myself, even as I fear the fall. I've hit the ground before, you know. I proudly boast a brushburn's scar. Drop the curtain on this stage-- I will not bother to return to take a bow on center mark-- I thoroughly enjoyed your comment... but this is such a remarkable statement of power and taking control... and I simply can't imagine you ever opting out... there's too much fight in you. *S* Excellent work... enjoy that garden! *S* (Just be careful... I happen to know a few folks who "borrow" freely from others' labors! LOL) |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Serenity~ Enjoyed " Tell it Like it is " Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
VERY cool, serene one. I love this.Hugs, you... "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I've bled the snake of all his oil-- this road no longer sparks allure. .. .. I proudly boast a brushburn's scar. .. .. The gypsy will not dance for coin. ......... I am in agreement with Janet ... I will pay to read you... As always, I am extremely impressed by your writing... Thank you... regards, sudhir |
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