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Marie's Favorite Tree
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Marie's Favorite Tree |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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Ever walk out of your comfortable element open those French doors on your Versailles gardens and you share an apprehensive look at one corner, where the wind has struck and done its damage but you'd say that this is the Versailles and the place will always remain the same. Have you seen the tree that Marie Antoinette used to read by? can you imagine it too will be windblown one day just like her misdemeanor towards her subjects, just like bits off a penny loaf... as if bread is outdated on global scales and crumbs don't mean anything to a park full of pigeons but a fine gust of wind finds reason to displace the powdered crust... or are you just 'all set' hammered on by continous inflationary spirals yet tempted by the seduction of new milky ways; ever walk out on the faucet drip into a sink stacked with weekend clutter? no, you wouldn't want to upset your distant plans... although distant is not that far off when you play with dangerous toys and polish the fine metallic finish of the 'real McCoy'. Walk out of an element and into another work up a sweat over a banal heart flutter sit by her tree and watch it sway its rich soil base turned into clay where were those rains that you needed to replenish the soils of your Versaille garden 'cause the crust you tread on has crumbled you see you undermine the penny loaf and the subjects it feeds. [This message has been edited by ecrivan (02-23-2003 01:45 AM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This one gets my vote. I enjoyed the read. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
don't know what the limit is to posting...am on an inspirational streak lately..thanks loner |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Chock full of wonderful images. *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You're a fine philosopher and an astute observer of life--and you have the intelligence, imagination, and talent to convey your thoughts very well! Warm nighttime hugs, EA |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
EA said it so well...I agree! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Martin, I agree with Linda, you are very astute and hold so much validity to the wisdom and everything that is worth writing about, I too felt I was walking around the Hall of Mirrors and stepping out onto the French countryside! (sigh) This is remarkable, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martin, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Linda, Oh I wasn't expecting all those complements...but the power of keen observation I'd say is traditional...and honed by a keen sense of survival...thanks for your kind words and how they make me feel  |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martin, I also agree with Linda, and could not say it any better than she did. You are a very talented writer and this has my vote... Hugs, Ethel |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Martie, A pleasure to have written something you appreciate  |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Hi Noah, and from the hall of mirrors this one came forth..but sadly one revolution did not solve the issue  |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Appreciate your click Ethyl...got to thank my family/friends for their training and support |
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Minister Joe Member
since 2003-02-22
Posts 78TX, USA |
Martin, This does remind me of some of the experimental work of August Highland. He has an ability to mix political/social themes--with more grounded images. Having the tree as a center for this piece--something natural, growing, changing, but still rooted in one spot unable to move--very telling of the subject you used to associate with it. Very nicely executed, thank you very much. --Matt Give what you have. To someone, it may be better than you dare to think. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you certainly are on a wonderful streak! and I thank you for sharing that |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
*** Have you seen the tree that Marie Antoinette used to read by? can you imagine it too will be windblown one day just like her misdemeanor towards her subjects, just like bits off a penny loaf... as if bread is outdated on global scales and crumbs don't mean anything to a park full of pigeons but a fine gust of wind finds reason to displace the powdered crust... *** Forever from an observant historian's perspective. Well done, Martin. I enjoy your composites of past, present, future. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
You continue to amaze! Eric |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Solid! Very very solid. Sounds booklike to me..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Thought is would be a natural alliteration what else to we associate with the changing seasons, thinking that with spring there is 'change' yet our habits can be just as difficult to uproot. "Having the tree as a center for this piece--something natural, growing, changing, but still rooted in one spot unable to move--very telling of the subject you used to associate with it." Thanks Minister Joe;0 |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Eric, amazing inspiration, I'd say too... Passing Shadows, I wonder how all this will morph, stay tuned! |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Ratleader, In fact this is how bookish I want to get to...the references are clear enough..thanks guy |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
And I think you will -- good stuff! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Your writing is changing a bit I think, and I for one am really enjoying the subtle transition - especially this piece. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Mysteria, Good to hear that, in fact I can see that I am now longer happy with the shorter verses, and limited meter per line, am also writing freelance so I think the result comes fro the fusion of my past style of the past 2 years and my prose and article work. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Ratleader, just thinking how people used to venerate rats in the past and condemn cats...your pseudo reminded me of the transition in our preferences...the riddle element keeps the bookish form from floundering I think...and all this was mostly spontaneous...here's to our health and wealth of poetic material! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
many wonderful images, Martin...I wish I had a tree to sit by and read and or write poetry...I planted some new ones...will take a year or two to shade my thoughts M |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
I wish I had my own garden to do that..thanks for sharing Maureen |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Another insightful write, M...  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Always a pleasure to read your words |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
How did I miss this? Oh wait, I didn't! |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Nan, isightful and sometime spiteful..hehe Aenimal pleasure is likewise with your choice of descriptive words Karilea never missed, just temporarily lost in the shuffle...the family is getting bigger here! |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
A wonderful write, enjoyed the read of this.  |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
LOL Maureen, come over here, I have trees galore. Love it, getting my vote. Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
How well you word these thoughts that should tune us in... An excellent write, and I am happy to give it my vote. Wonderful job. TD |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Titia, I am Martin, not Maureen..maybe there are to many names that begin with M here?...I would like to visit Holland someday soon Diamond, Thanks for your vote! |
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