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Sunshine
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0 posted 02-22-2003 07:51 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


DreamStates

Jake’s biggest problem with Konrad
Was his persistent
Away time.
He could be right in front of you
But not there, somewhere else.

Jake never did comprehend
That sometimes, elsewhere was better
Than the arguing, the slapping,
Their mother’s crying,
The fearful looks on the face of baby Dillon,
The pretense of the younger Iambe
To shrug off her surroundings.

Jake was always there in the moment
Needing his brother’s ire to match his.
It was never there.

It bought Konrad a bloody nose or two
And Jake’s spite.

Konrad had realized his escape mechanism
A long time ago, and never knew why
It was this way, he had tried
Several times
To turn it off.  It was not to be.

Of course the other reason
Jake’s contempt always surfaced, was
Konrad’s given name.

Probably the only thing that saved him
Was that Konrad looked more like
Their mother
Than him.

~*~

Konrad’s thoughts were back there
in Iambe’s kitchen, while under his feet
was the dust gone to green in soft plush tropical
grasses of Tabasco.

Fertile was the feel coming up through Konrad’s ankles,
Growth was making him feel both
Huge, and insignificant,
with every breath he took,
Scents and sounds
Surrounding him, the jungle shaping
His mood.

Dana had written of the magnificence of this
Zone, the facts, basic and simple,
But she had missed out on the telling of the lush,
Lusty feel and now, now he could understand
Why the Mayans would draw her so.

Perhaps she had not briefed him
So that his senses would not be overplayed
With expectation…

Hard to tell, with Dana.

She had mentioned something else, too,
About calendars, how the Mayans had not looked
Lineally at time, but circularly,
Within within…

She had noted at that moment of the writing
Of that note, she could not describe it
Any other way.  

But as Konrad looked around, the pinkening
Hue of dawn’s light crept in as silently as a boa,
As hummingbirds
Began to engorge themselves on the
Flora’s spicy nectars,

And he understood.

It all goes around.

Konrad’s thoughts flitted, back to Iambe’s kitchen,
Back to Dillon, and Jake…

In another realm, they would have
Loved him.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (02-22-2003 08:25 AM).]

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Sunshine
Great, loved the read.
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2 posted 02-22-2003 09:15 AM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

YES!!  I am loving these Karilea...
May we have more please?
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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very nice...

regards,
sudhir
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Karilea....I want more too please. I didn't want this to end...just wanted to sit here in my flannel jammies all day and read with hot tea and butter tarts. hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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'Fertile was the feel coming up through Konrad’s ankles,
Growth was making him feel both
Huge, and insignificant,
with every breath he took,
Scents and sounds
Surrounding him, the jungle shaping
His mood.'

.

'Perhaps she had not briefed him
So that his senses would not be overplayed
With expectation…'

.

'And he understood.

It all goes around.

Konrad’s thoughts flitted, back to Iambe’s kitchen,
Back to Dillon, and Jake…

In another realm, they would have
Loved him.'


So many verses and images that I liked in this one Kari.
About the last line...I've been thinking about that.  (Blame cabin fever, I don't know... )  Konrad adds a depth to this group, by his very difference in nature.  It's not always an easy adjustment for me to make (as the writer of another character) and so understanding his familial distance, follows.  
Got me thinking again, I really wish you'd stop that!!!  

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Konrad’s thoughts were back there
in Iambe’s kitchen, while under his feet
was the dust gone to green in soft plush tropical
grasses of Tabasco.

Fertile was the feel coming up through Konrad’s ankles,
Growth was making him feel both
Huge, and insignificant,
with every breath he took,
Scents and sounds
Surrounding him, the jungle shaping
His mood
===============================

But as Konrad looked around, the pinkening
Hue of dawn’s light crept in as silently as a boa,
As hummingbirds
Began to engorge themselves on the
Flora’s spicy nectars,

And he understood.

It all goes around.

Konrad’s thoughts flitted, back to Iambe’s kitchen,
Back to Dillon, and Jake…

In another realm, they would have
Loved him.

==================================


"mama ... dont let your babies grow up to be cowboys"


loving the imagery of places I'll never see but in my mind..loving the depth of the characters that I feel in my heart.
Carry on poetess Sun...carry on Konnieboy

oouuu eeee oouu ah ah ting tang walla walla bing bang ...
oouuu eeee oouu ah ah ting tang walla walla bing bang
;)

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There's nothing like Sunshine and Prose.

Hmm... nice title for a poem!

Sunkissed
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good write.

andrea
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9 posted 02-24-2003 10:18 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

"mama ... dont let your babies grow up to be cowboys"

JM touched on something here...but there is more underneath and a sadness that regardless of whether 'cowboys" or lawyers...
one lives in another realm always than the one they would have...if they were honest with themselves and those around...

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10 posted 02-24-2003 11:09 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Enjoyed...James
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11 posted 05-12-2004 01:47 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Oh it gets betterer and betterer

M xx

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colours, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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I love dreams

ARCTIC WIND
 
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