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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2003-02-21 02:43 PM


written Valentine's Day, 2003

You wipe crumbs off your burgundy dress,
like wine and bread.
Surrounding stones engraved with old names.
Obelisks marked with time and place.

Your mouth parts slowly -- not to eat.
A kiss that shudders the cemetery leaves.
As winsome angels gather the view
of crow's foot fields, and I, and you

hold as close as clouds hold the sky.
Your hair falls just so over your eyes.
We watch late light lay breath on day.
Our shadows meander, and slip away.

I know it's over.
The Smiths

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Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2003-02-21 02:46 PM


Ah Mikey....so good to see your words again...and such a fantastic write it is.  Each word captured the feel, the moment.  Well done indeed sir!
WhileIWasGone
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2 posted 2003-02-21 03:04 PM


Great work M....This is amazing...and beautiful. I'm in awe...

H

Darksoul
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3 posted 2003-02-21 03:06 PM


I really enjoyed this piece
Anvrill
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in the interzone now
4 posted 2003-02-21 03:45 PM


I ain't never gettin' enough of this poem. Wish I could be back!

remember the sound
that could wake the dead
but nobody woke up at all

rs

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5 posted 2003-02-21 03:58 PM


We watch late light lay breath on day.
Our shadows meander, and slip away.


what better way to end this excellent verse...
enjoyed Mikey...

Aenimal
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6 posted 2003-02-21 04:02 PM


Now this is a valentine worthy of giving and recieving, no Hallmark BS here

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (02-21-2003 04:03 PM).]

Janet Marie
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7 posted 2003-02-21 05:42 PM


Your mouth parts slowly -- not to eat.
A kiss that shudders the cemetery leaves.
As winsome angels gather the view
of crow's foot fields, and I, and you

hold as close as clouds hold the sky.
Your hair falls just so over your eyes.
We watch late light lay breath on day.
Our shadows meander, and slip away.
==========================================
you two inspire such amazing things in each other...poetry in motion...
love this write Mikey!!

"Trees are poems that the earth writes upon the sky ...
We fell them down to turn them into paper that we may record our emptiness."

K.Gibran


Severn
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8 posted 2003-02-21 05:52 PM


I like it you...it rocks..

K

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
9 posted 2003-02-21 07:06 PM


We watch late light lay breath on day.


Such a beautiful line, Mike.

M

bsquirrel
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10 posted 2003-02-24 11:42 AM


Thank you.
passing shadows
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11 posted 2003-02-24 12:22 PM


always amazed at the way you write
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
12 posted 2003-02-24 01:37 PM


Mike..I am in awe of your writing...
Lori sure does inspire..ain't love grand!!
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Seymour Tabin
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13 posted 2003-02-24 01:41 PM


bsquirrel
Well done, enjoyed the read.

bsquirrel
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14 posted 2003-02-24 05:02 PM



Duncan
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15 posted 2003-02-24 07:35 PM


'Your mouth parts slowly -- not to eat.
A kiss that shudders the cemetery leaves.
As winsome angels gather the view
of crow's foot fields, and I, and you'

There's something about a cemetary...thought I was the only one.  

Mistletoe Angel
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16 posted 2003-02-24 08:51 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Michael, this is so beautiful with a haunting edge, sweet friend, I can tell Lori so deeply inspires your muse, I hope all with her is even better than ever! (sigh) This is fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
17 posted 2003-02-25 07:14 PM



This...
makes us voyeurs...

thanks for taking
us there...

Connel
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18 posted 2003-02-25 07:38 PM


Very nice.. Enjoyed every word!

Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart.

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