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Sky (to meet chall. I made)
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Sky (to meet chall. I made) |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Technically an adverb is and adj. of a verb, but I said show me your sky without any adj. I've used an adverbial phrase show how the hours move, but since I didn't say no adverbs, I'm going to let it pass for an attempt, anyway. firmament brightens daylight the hours grow at crawl ©February 21, 2003 Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Methinks you did it! ~ May your day be one of beauty from sunrise to sunset... Warm hugs, EA |
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Elan Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 382State of Wide Eye |
Perhaps I shall accept your challenge, but this...this is perfect! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely done VAS... nice indeed. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Virginia, excellent senryu! you really packed lots of meaning within this one...especially liked the use of firmament  |
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