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Heavenly Look..........a Haiku (I think)
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Heavenly Look..........a Haiku (I think) |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA 
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Looking Heavenly In velvet sky at midnight The sparkle of stars [This message has been edited by garysgirl (02-21-2003 01:04 AM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Lovely Ethel if i may make one suggestion, change Is sparkle to The sparkle on the last line [This message has been edited by Aenimal (02-20-2003 11:34 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Beautiful Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Ethel, this is sooooooo gorgeous, sweet friend, this reminded me so much of warm summer nights that truly feel like velvet, all balmy and comforting! (kiss on cheek) This is another gem for your love poetry library, sweet friend, I just love your love poems, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ethel, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Raph...I changed it and it does look better.....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Julie. I appreciate you reading and replying.... "Love makes the world go around" |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Noah. You're so nice... "Love makes the world go around" |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Thank you for sharing. I like the japanese forms and you certainly did this one right. INclan |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I like the 'velvet sky" This is lovely Liz |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, InClan. I really love the Japanese verses. I'm still not exactly sure if I have them right all the time, though.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Liz. I really appreciate you reading and replying to my poems.... "Love makes the world go around" ~with love and hugs from Ethel GG~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (02-21-2003 03:29 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yep! well done! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Dixie-girl... "Love makes the world go around" |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Very very lovely! I think a haiku guru would say it's a senyru, but nevertheless, it's beautiful. Wonderful imaging. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Virginia....I just can't seem to get the names correct. But, it sure is fun doing the syllable thing. I'll get it sooner or later, though. Thanks for being so helpful....... Heart hugs, Ethel |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
You do these well...they're fun, aren't they?? believe in what your heart feels... |
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Elan Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 382State of Wide Eye |
Yes, Ethel, a haiku... all nature, no personification... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A simply divine haiku! Warm morning hugs, Linda |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Scorpio Elan Linda I thank you all very much for your sweet replies. I really do appreciate them.... "Love makes the world go around" |
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