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0 posted 2003-02-20 07:57 PM



I’ve lived a life like the fish,
Going where the ocean takes me

What's it like to breathe,
in a place so far below

Sometimes the water's too thick,
sometimes it's too cold to breathe

It’s hard to be a fish,
And still be yourself,

Sometimes you’re caught in someone’s net,
Or you are tossed by the waves.

If you even survive,
What's left isn't much

I know there are plenty of fish in the ocean,
But that doesn’t mean no one should care about me

(hint: I'm not a fish so don't feel bad)

the Wind is invisible.
        remeber me

© Copyright 2003 Liz - All Rights Reserved
gemjop
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1 posted 2003-02-20 08:05 PM


Liz, is it really you? you're back?!!    i've missed your little magical poems. you really do paint pictures with your words.

But that doesn’t mean no one should care about me

true, we care about you! although, if you WERE a fish, i'd have to pass on liking you so much, cos fish freak me out. i'll shut up now. nice to see u again friend!
lots of love, gemma xxxxxxx

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

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2 posted 2003-02-20 08:18 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Liz, this is so very touching, sweet friend, I too don't like that saying "There are plenty of fish in the sea!" as can you imagine the grief the fish have to endure with the oil and coral reefs disappearing? (sad sigh) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, I send angel hugs your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Liz, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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3 posted 2003-02-21 03:46 AM


awesome write girl!
Neeraja
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4 posted 2003-03-09 10:15 AM


Don't you ever stop writing Wind!!!

Neeraja

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By the sea
5 posted 2003-03-10 05:27 PM


You write with a wisdom beyond your years.  Much enjoyed!  
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6 posted 2003-03-10 07:11 PM


ah..though there are many fish... they are each in some ways unique...

enjoyed... nicely done

( see... no outburst... I am trying to be good )

GG
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7 posted 2003-03-10 07:28 PM


great analogy, great poem.
Sometimes it seems like your just caught in the tide of all thats going on.. and unnoticeable.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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