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rm711
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since 2002-11-30
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Wiltshire, England

0 posted 2003-02-20 06:05 PM



I don’t want the door open
Make sure the windows are locked
Cut the telephone cable
Turn my mobile off

Shut the world out
Then maybe I can shut myself up
Because my screaming is deafening
Even to me
Even on the inside

Turn off all the lights
Block out all the shadows
Turn my world into a gloom all of it’s own
My shelter from you

Shut the world out
Then maybe I can shut myself up
Because my tears are overflowing
Even in here
Even on the inside

Cataract my vision
Take away all colour
Turn the world to shades of grey
Make me even smaller

Shut the world out
Then maybe I can shut myself up
Because my head is suffering the blows
Even alone
Even on the inside

Take away my breathing
Make this life thing go away
Turn me to stone
And take me out to play

Shut the world out
Then maybe I can shut myself up
Because after being with you
I’ve forgotten how to live
Without you
Even on the inside.


small insignificant useless me

[This message has been edited by rm711 (02-20-2003 06:09 PM).]

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the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA
1 posted 2003-02-20 06:13 PM


This is what I call a wonderfully written poem.

Cold hands means a warm heart

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA
2 posted 2003-02-20 06:22 PM


Rosie, this is my favourite poem of yours, it has reached to different levels.

this is so honest in its entirety. i really identified with the visions of shutting down all aspects of life, in order to shut yourself up. i could feel the endless patterns of thought that you so want to end, through the repetition of certain lines.

its like that feeling where all you want to do is sleep, cos you dont want to think anymore.
enjoyed this completely soulfelt write rosie.
lots of love, gemma xxxxxxxxxxx

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
3 posted 2003-02-20 07:23 PM


My goodness, you just poured it all out and reached out and grabbed this reader! This living hades that you are living in at the present time, has to work itself out--and your writing like this should surely help! This write must have been very cathartic! Keep 'em rollin'!

Warm hugs,
Earth Angel

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
4 posted 2003-02-21 03:54 AM


GOD! This is so ME!
rm711
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since 2002-11-30
Posts 131
Wiltshire, England
5 posted 2003-02-21 06:45 AM


thankyou very much
lol no its not you its me!!
ive sort of just realised that ive fallen in love and its scary!

small insignificant useless me

P.R.C
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since 2003-01-31
Posts 40
Hull, England
6 posted 2003-02-23 12:56 PM


YAY Rosie!! cool poem, its gr8. awwww in love how sweet if its who i think it is, gr8 choice!!
rm711
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since 2002-11-30
Posts 131
Wiltshire, England
7 posted 2003-02-23 01:03 PM


lol yeh it is who u think
aaaaa, i love him!!
wot to do about it, lol
thankz all 4 replyin
rosie xxx

small insignificant useless me

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
8 posted 2003-02-23 10:40 PM


it would be so much easier to shake them off, but thats empty in itself, so ill take the angst and pain most days
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