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gemjop
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0 posted 2003-02-20 05:50 PM



Desert wind
flips and rolls like train...
of thought

irrational brief hauntings
invade and strike gold
bribing my mind to meet with you

weakened soft bones
raising alarm of alien desert ahead
its all the same
but no one tells me

echo does the grief and melting
re mould and glue with useless care
it never existed
why do you pry?

shake the hand of worry
offer a seat

the company evokes images black
inconsistant ventures to unseen

still

i give with each curious gaping wound
to what isnt mine.

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

© Copyright 2003 gj - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 2003-02-20 06:18 PM


I love the imagery

Cold hands means a warm heart

KoKo
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2 posted 2003-02-20 06:33 PM


This is extremely well written. It stirs up so many emotions for me. Thank you

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

Aenimal
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3 posted 2003-02-20 08:19 PM


Gemma I love your writing but if i may be so bold, i find this to be your best yet. fantastic
garysgirl
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4 posted 2003-02-20 09:07 PM


Gemma, this is really good.    
You really are a good writer, friend.....
Hugs,
Ethel Mae  

gemjop
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5 posted 2003-02-20 09:42 PM



julie,
thankyou for your ever supportive replies.


koko,
Thankyou so much, my pleasure. yep it contains stuff i never knew about myself and the world before, scary, but exploring self further i suppose.

Raph,
i'm taken back by your comment. and i'm gracuious for sucha compliment. the poem was scary to write, a whole world off stuff recently opened up infront of my eyes, nightmarish. so thanks, it really means a lot.

Ethel Mae,
you too yanno sweetheart? thankyou too for the huge compliment. your replies mean so much friend. thanks for reading my muddled thoughts.

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

passing shadows
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6 posted 2003-02-21 03:44 AM


one of your best, I think!
regards2you
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7 posted 2003-02-21 09:11 AM




Gemma,

Though I am not that familiar with your past poetry to offer an opinion,  in this one, I really like the first six lines, especially.

Writing is a wonderful way of self-examination and sharing it sparks memories or feelings for the reader.

Thanks for this, Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Darksoul
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8 posted 2003-02-21 10:27 AM


Wonderfully written!
Thomas119gold
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9 posted 2003-02-27 11:55 AM


I am a first time reader of your writes
and I am hooked

your talent for poetry is wonderful
I think I will read more
Thomas

gemjop
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10 posted 2003-02-27 12:02 PM


everyone, thankyou again for your wonderful replies, thomas119gold, wow, what a compliment, i'm speechless and undeserving,but thankyou very much.

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

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