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Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-02-19 10:07 PM


The desecration
makes me long
for new temple

One you cannot defile
idols wraught in
hollow mockery of craft

The circle chants
of loathesome banalities,
cliques and sycophancy

Will be death of this

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (02-19-2003 10:39 PM).]

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Greeneyes
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Member Rara Avis
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1 posted 2003-02-19 10:36 PM


brilliant....continued...

the last line death....almost a contradiction..for the meaning I took from the poem......maybe I was reading wrong....just my view.....
Lauren~

Take me where the tides start
So I can pull you into me

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
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the ass-end of space
2 posted 2003-02-19 10:40 PM


thank you again greeneyes, i've changed the last line which hopefully fixes the problem, i'd meant this originally but it felt awkward..
wranx
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3 posted 2003-02-19 11:20 PM


This is a poser, it is.

And have no answer for ya, Raff.

But we seek, eh?

Ed

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4 posted 2003-02-20 12:25 PM


Raph, I don't know exactly what your
meaning of this poem is, so I kept deleting what I had typed.
It did make me try to figure out what you meant...

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel GG~  
                  

passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2003-02-20 03:26 AM


what ya been drinkin'?
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