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Sunshine
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Dust Storms

Konrad pointed his nose
South, southeast, thinking a freighter
Might have been the better
Of the trip,
But not wanting to deal with
Water-rats, he felt safer on foot
And left the familial storm behind him,

Catching trucks,
Having passed from
Reynosa through Tamauiplas,
Stopping the second night out of
Nuevo Laredo in Ciudad Victoria.

23.8° N 99.1° W,
Knowing he had left
The cold behind, and deeper
Troughs of bygone times,
Death certificates notwithstanding,
102 humid degrees pasted his blue flannel
Pulling on his biceps, and he wondered,
Then dismissed
Any thought of pulling a new shirt
From his duffel bag;
Temps would drop by nightfall, even
A sweat-soaked dirty shirt was better than
A thin white T…

The sun was falling over the mountains
As the trucker pulled into the cantina,
The dust powdery, different, not held back
By the humidity on this side
Of Mexico.

A petite senorita nodded
As Konrad parted swinging doors,
Noting a fan circling
Lazy overhead, moving as much dust
As air, and not much of either settling,

He held his fingers to form the holding
Of an imaginary stein, his abilities at holding
A conversation less than the invisible drink
He had just ordered.

No wonder Jake often thought him a bother,
Never was good with
Languages, except for that of the
Unutterable ones,
Ones that Jake didn’t always comprehend,
But that Iambe understood,
And Dillon felt…

“Senor?” the soft voice was not
The deep voice of Dana, although her
Skin was brown, and creamy,
She was not tall, and though her hair was dark,
She did not have the rich chocolate eyes
Of Dana…

Dust gritted Konrad’s eyes, having
Parched his mouth most of
The last two days,
Wearily he wondered where the trucker
Had gone, before he reached up

Took the beer from her small hands,
Gave her some coins, and drank deep.
The bitter chill made him shiver, he had
Not expected it so cold,
And it drained well.

Perhaps sensing his lack of ability,
The young girl ventured,
“Donde tu eres ida – ah, you are
somewhere going?”

Konrad, tired, sleepy, the beer hitting his
Belly hard, looked up into gray eyes,
Muttered, “Belize”, his head falling
Forward onto his arm,
And before he could see only black,
He heard, “come back to me,”
Cried weakly, “Dana!”
And slept.
© Copyright 2003 Karilea Rilling - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 02-19-2003 11:03 PM       View Profile for the_loner_23   Email the_loner_23   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_loner_23

This story just keeps getting better

Cold hands means a warm heart

Duncan
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2 posted 02-19-2003 11:07 PM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

Yes!  This I can learn from.
Like the edge you are giving Konrad, he deserves it after all those headaches...lol.
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3 posted 02-19-2003 11:10 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

I'm really beginning to feel as though I'm watching this fantastic drama play out in front of my eyes!
The images are incredible.
Excellent Karilea!
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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4 posted 02-20-2003 12:09 AM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Excellent, Karilea...very interesting...

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel GG~  
                  

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5 posted 02-20-2003 09:33 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

nice... weaving this well... but I worry about him sleeping there in the bar...
(chuckling)

very well done my friend..very well told....
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ENJOYED
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and the saga continues......
and I continue to enjoy...
well done friend.
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The sun was falling over the mountains
As the trucker pulled into the cantina,
The dust powdery, different, not held back
By the humidity on this side
Of Mexico.

A petite senorita nodded
As Konrad parted swinging doors,
Noting a fan circling
Lazy overhead, moving as much dust
As air, and not much of either settling,


He held his fingers to form the holding
Of an imaginary stein, his abilities at holding
A conversation less than the invisible drink
He had just ordered.

No wonder Jake often thought him a bother,
Never was good with
Languages, except for that of the
Unutterable ones,
Ones that Jake didn’t always comprehend,
But that Iambe understood,
And Dillon felt…
================================


I do so enjoy when you keep us circling....
love the imagery in this.

Dont let him nap too long

" ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ...
if it finds you worthy ...  it then directs your course."

K.Gibran

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Just a two-day nap was all, JM...

yes, Donna, the saga...continues...what a mess...

thank you, Vandana!

Cpat, some guys just don't invite trouble from outsiders, only from their family...right?

Ethel...interesting is a good word.  Thank you!

Enchantress, if I can keep you fascinated, then you ought to be following Cpat...he will keep you ENTRANCED!

Duncan, the migraines come and go....but if he can get centered, he's fine...

thank you Julie!...
kayjay
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10 posted 02-21-2003 01:26 PM       View Profile for kayjay   Email kayjay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kayjay

Well, I'm getting the pieces out of sequences but loving it just the same.  I'm sneezing with the dust and dripping with the humidity.  KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Earth Angel
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...and the saga continues... Please keep it going and never stop!

~ Keep on spinning these yarns of gold...

Warm hugs,
Linda
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12 posted 05-12-2004 01:41 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Can't wait to find out where he goes after he awakens.

M xx

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colours, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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Very Much Enjoyed Sunshine!

ARCTIC WIND
 
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