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Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-02-19 01:45 PM


Tongue of flames that enveloped
leaving blackened soul aftermath
You the rubberneck bystander
to twisted wreck of flesh and bone

I offer no apologies
I offered no promise
this is all I am

Fate not chosen but served
swallowed it as air unconsciously
orange pylon yellow tape aura warns
of twisted wreck of flesh and bone

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (02-19-2003 03:39 PM).]

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the_loner_23
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1 posted 2003-02-19 01:50 PM


Awesome write

Cold hands means a warm heart

Brad Majors
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2 posted 2003-02-19 01:58 PM


amzing!!
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3 posted 2003-02-19 04:35 PM


I applaud you, in standing fashion.....amazing....


Lauren~

Take me where the tides start
So I can pull you into me

regards2you
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4 posted 2003-02-19 04:56 PM




Interesting poem in the essence of it can be applied in other situations.

To take it literally I have chased one or two fire engines in my lifetime, but never would even want to see the results of the described. I am a coward, for I'd be afraid I wouldn't or couldn't be able to help or add anything positive to a deadly scene, and might cause more injury.

Assuming help had arrived, and it appeared survivors able to take care of selves. So I'd stay away.


Enjoyed, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2003-02-19 05:49 PM


Aenimal
Interesting write.

Jason Lyle
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6 posted 2003-02-19 07:40 PM


I offer no apologies
I offered no promise
this is all I am

Impressive write.....as always.
Jason

Aenimal
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7 posted 2003-02-19 07:56 PM


thanks loner

brad many thanks and the feeling for your work is mutual

lauren thanks you for the constant boost of ego

thanks pat, i think alot of people are afraid to help nowadays, mostly due to the threat of lawsuit. this was another of my metaphorical flights, sometimes people seem like wrecks and again some people too afraid to help or to see it all through. thanks for the reply

thanks Seymour i'd hoped so

Jason thanks and your words are a welcome addition here, i like your style

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8 posted 2003-02-20 04:14 AM


"this is all I am"
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9 posted 2003-09-21 08:36 PM


                                    

Artic Wind
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10 posted 2008-01-29 08:47 PM


Very Interesting write indeed

ARCTIC WIND

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11 posted 2008-01-29 11:58 PM


"You the rubberneck bystander"

smiling

wow

You always had a way of making me able to type replies with a clenched fist.

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