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Soleil Noir
Senior Member

since 2001-12-19

Posts 688
USA

0 posted 2003-02-18 02:40 PM

One wall,
Two doors
Steps away
From a life before…

Two decades and some
Years stumble into now
Emotions obscured
Feeling wonder of how

It had been
Better than good
Now those habits
Had turned to wood

Where had they gone
Tender touches of here
Somewhere, perhaps,
But no longer near

Comments, unkind,
“Why are you up?”
Shaking weary a need of sleep
Finding hot the coffee cup

Fall into one
With rising sun
Hearing the snore
Time knots undone

Ages of decade
Swing between two
He wanted someone young
She wanted love, true

One wall
Two doors
Steps away
From a life before

“You’re up too soon,
leave me sleep,”
Watch sun kiss moon
Plumb emotions deep

Scratch of pen
Paper wings
Flights of thought
Happiness brings

“You writing again?”
A broken sound
As bones do break
When mentally bound

Persistence is,
As persistence knows,
Sand from rock
As rivers flow

Harsher words
Come to her ears
His own aspirations
Now garner tears

Still, she believes
Her own dreams will true
Never mind love
Is not part of the roux

One wall
Two doors
She steps away
From a life before

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2003-02-18 02:43 PM

When communications goes it seems that love is not far behind it - and this is SO sad. You have written this only too well.

~* Carpe' Diem *~

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

2 posted 2003-02-18 02:46 PM

I love the imagery and metaphores and all you use in this, it creates a wonderful poem. I was going to try to choose a favororite line, but I just cant pick!

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

3 posted 2003-02-18 02:48 PM

I loved everything about this poem

Cold hands means a warm heart

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2003-02-18 02:52 PM

so it goes at times... the words stop..or stop meaning anything..then the doors close.. only sometimes to be opened for exit..

Soleil Noir
Senior Member

since 2001-12-19

Posts 688
USA

5 posted 2003-02-18 02:53 PM

So true, Cpat, so true...
just some fleeting thoughts captured
for a small time...

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2003-02-18 03:01 PM

I know this feeling all too well.
Heart hugs my friend.

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Brad_Smith
Member

since 2004-01-09

Posts 70
Dallas, Texas

7 posted 2004-01-09 12:59 PM

such an amazing poem. each stanza a poem in itself and i love love love the part that is reminiscent of Forrest Gump

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

8 posted 2008-01-29 10:09 PM

Everyone said it all

ARCTIC WIND

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