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One Wall, Two Doors

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Soleil Noir
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0 posted 02-18-2003 02:40 PM       View Profile for Soleil Noir   Email Soleil Noir   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Soleil Noir


One wall,
Two doors
Steps away
From a life before…

Two decades and some
Years stumble into now
Emotions obscured
Feeling wonder of how

It had been
Better than good
Now those habits
Had turned to wood

Where had they gone
Tender touches of here
Somewhere, perhaps,
But no longer near

Comments, unkind,
“Why are you up?”
Shaking weary a need of sleep
Finding hot the coffee cup

Fall into one
With rising sun
Hearing the snore
Time knots undone

Ages of decade
Swing between two
He wanted someone young
She wanted love, true

One wall
Two doors
Steps away
From a life before

“You’re up too soon,
leave me sleep,”
Watch sun kiss moon
Plumb emotions deep

Scratch of pen
Paper wings
Flights of thought
Happiness brings

“You writing again?”
A broken sound
As bones do break
When mentally bound

Persistence is,
As persistence knows,
Sand from rock
As rivers flow

Harsher words
Come to her ears
His own aspirations
Now garner tears

Still, she believes
Her own dreams will true
Never mind love
Is not part of the roux

One wall
Two doors
She steps away
From a life before


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Mysteria
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1 posted 02-18-2003 02:43 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

When communications goes it seems that love is not far behind it - and this is SO sad.  You have written this only too well.

          
~* Carpe' Diem *~  

GG
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Lost in thought


2 posted 02-18-2003 02:46 PM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GG

I love the imagery and metaphores and all you use in this, it creates a wonderful poem. I was going to try to choose a favororite line, but I just cant pick!

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

the_loner_23
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3 posted 02-18-2003 02:48 PM       View Profile for the_loner_23   Email the_loner_23   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_loner_23

I loved everything about this poem

Cold hands means a warm heart

Cpat Hair
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4 posted 02-18-2003 02:52 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

so it goes at times... the words stop..or stop meaning anything..then the doors close.. only sometimes to be opened for exit..

Soleil Noir
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5 posted 02-18-2003 02:53 PM       View Profile for Soleil Noir   Email Soleil Noir   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Soleil Noir


So true, Cpat, so true...
just some fleeting thoughts captured
for a small time...
Enchantress
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Somewhere in time~


6 posted 02-18-2003 03:01 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

I know this feeling all too well.
Heart hugs my friend.

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Brad_Smith
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since 01-09-2004
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7 posted 01-09-2004 12:59 PM       View Profile for Brad_Smith   Email Brad_Smith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brad_Smith

such an amazing poem. each stanza a poem in itself and i love love love the part that is reminiscent of Forrest Gump
Artic Wind
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8 posted 01-29-2008 10:09 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Everyone said it all



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