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pk
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0 posted 2003-02-18 01:33 PM



Alone
I awaken
This world now a prison
I picture you
Surrounded by thoughts of original sin
And ask to be forgiven
But it is cloudy today
And Gods lost in other things
So my heart melts again
Knowing she was the one for me
I can only sink
Let her go please
No! shes my destiny
My faith My belief
Is it not better to die
Then to compound thy sin
With thoughts that cannot be
False loyalty
Perhaps i can get her back!
Don't be silly
You left here once
Never to be forgiven

"Imagine what you would do if you knew no one was looking"

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the_loner_23
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1 posted 2003-02-18 02:10 PM


This is so sad. But it is well written and I like it.

Cold hands means a warm heart

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2 posted 2003-02-18 02:43 PM


this reminds me of the scene in Romeo and Juliet, as they compare kissing to sin.
Enjoyed, though painful

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

pk
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3 posted 2003-02-18 03:03 PM


thanks for the reply. The poem was inspired after reading Thomas Hardy's "Tess of the D'Ubervilles". It is a very good book.

"Imagine what you would do if you knew no one was looking"

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4 posted 2003-02-18 03:28 PM


enjoyed this very much
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5 posted 2003-02-18 03:43 PM


very well written
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6 posted 2003-02-18 04:43 PM


Yeah, mon, haven't we all been through that!

Remembering Penny/Janice/Donna/Gisela/Susan/Pat/Deanna/.........

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