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LilTai
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0 posted 2003-02-17 01:30 PM



Rain

We are as the rain
Falling forever in love
Spilling from the clouds


   Tai


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Brad Majors
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1 posted 2003-02-17 02:05 PM


Very nicely done!
JamesMichael
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2 posted 2003-02-17 03:18 PM


I think so...and some don't like to get wet...James
Quiet Acquiescence
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3 posted 2003-02-17 03:21 PM


Oh that's so cool. Nice job.

~*~me~*~

"Remember, courage is wings."
~*~Heather Francis~*~

Dark Angel
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4 posted 2003-02-17 03:47 PM


Beautiful!

Maree

ThisDiamond
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5 posted 2003-02-17 03:56 PM


Exceptional images. Great write.
ThisDiamond

VAS
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6 posted 2003-02-17 04:01 PM


from the words of a friend who has studied haiku greatly, she would say it was a senyru, as haiku do not have metaphor, simile or human element

but it is a fantastic senyru!!! The image is wonderful!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

the_loner_23
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7 posted 2003-02-17 04:03 PM


Beautiful

Cold hands means a warm heart

cinnamongirl
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8 posted 2003-02-17 04:28 PM


Sweet... lovely and sweet.  Such a pretty thought!

Thank you- it's a wonderful haiku!!

Love,
Moca

LilTai
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9 posted 2003-02-17 05:08 PM


Thanks for reading everyone, I really appreciate it   
And VAS, thanks for the information, I didn't know that

   Tai


Waterbirdfly
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10 posted 2003-02-18 12:26 PM


What is "Haiku"? Who can translate it into Chinese?If can't,tell me it's Enlish meams by my email,please.
Jason Lyle
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11 posted 2003-02-18 01:33 AM


I like this,well done.
Jason

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