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inkedgoddess
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0 posted 2003-02-16 11:36 PM




treetops
erased by white,
swirling lights,
shaking sky,
shattered mirrors,
colors released
from above,
melt in crystal ice,
diamond studded
leaves of grass,
the virgin in white,
i stand,
alone,
in  dark,
the very first time,
everything
pauses,
all paths meet
at centerpoint,
i am nothing
i am everything,
no more,no less
than a mere
drop of ice,
peaceful
quiet
timeless
night,
a reflection
of myself,
invisible




[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (02-17-2003 09:18 AM).]

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the_loner_23
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1 posted 2003-02-16 11:38 PM


I love it. This is a truly heartfelt piece.

Cold hands means a warm heart

garysgirl
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2 posted 2003-02-16 11:49 PM


Now, Michele, you could never be invisible!!!! LOL  

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

Ericc
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3 posted 2003-02-17 10:30 AM


Beautiful.
Thank you,
Eric

regards2you
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4 posted 2003-02-17 11:06 AM




Michele,

This is really pretty. It is odd what we choose to project to the world when often there is that peaceful, quiet, timeless beauty within. All who learn to know you, know that about you.

Enjoyed, Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

majnu
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5 posted 2003-03-06 02:30 AM


sounds almost like an old jefferson airplane/starship song.

very cool.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

inkedgoddess
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6 posted 2003-03-06 07:17 AM


thanks for the dig up, california dreamer,
but duh? im blank, please im a fan of the ballin bunch, but which song?  where?

wranx
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7 posted 2003-03-06 01:12 PM


Liking the cool clarity I read here.

Nice, Michele

Ed

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8 posted 2003-03-06 01:39 PM


colors released
from above,
melt in crystal ice,
diamond studded
leaves of grass,
the virgin in white

********************************************
A very visual write. I enjoyed it greatly.

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
9 posted 2003-03-06 03:45 PM


awesome words mishy
KoKo
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Inside the shadow's shadow
10 posted 2003-03-06 04:40 PM


BEAUTIFUL!

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
11 posted 2003-03-06 08:15 PM


Wow!!
Poured down the page like a waterfall.
Such grace, such vision. Like the author.
Smiles from ThisDiamond

[This message has been edited by ThisDiamond (03-06-2003 08:16 PM).]

ctowen
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12 posted 2003-03-07 01:56 AM


Ones vision may be anothers dream.
BluesSerenade
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13 posted 2003-03-07 02:17 AM


I don't know how I missed this!

It's one of your best Michele~

How cool is the invisible ice cube analogy!

very!

littlewing
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14 posted 2003-03-07 02:25 AM


This is amazing - it just sings . . .
excellent inked xxoo

vandana
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15 posted 2003-03-08 06:58 PM


enjoy your read
gemjop
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16 posted 2003-03-08 07:22 PM


so smooth, calm and knowing. inked, ya are a very visibe poet godess!

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

Bill Charles
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17 posted 2003-03-08 09:14 PM


inkedgoddess - I don't think you're invisible, I can see your photo...

BC

passing shadows
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18 posted 2003-03-09 03:00 AM


I like it! lots!
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