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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


0 posted 02-16-2003 04:14 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


Farther Than Mexico

“Come back to me,”

the ancient sound of Dana’s voice,
tremulous and rich,
as rich as the chocolate of her eyes,
the sound of her
even smelled good,
if only in his memory…

Konrad’s truck made it to Nuevo Laredo,
but the rattling had begun back in Amarillo
and the blue smoke turned gray in San Angelo
then finally heaved a black sigh
when he pulled into the graveled pit
of a truck stop
and died.

Thinking that a truck stop
was as good a place
for any old truck to die,
Konrad hefted out his belongings,
took the title and registration
from the glove box,
and hoped his boots still had enough
sole

because the road was still long
between here, and the digs
where Dana should be.

Belize.  Where shards of pottery
were as plentiful as broken hearts
scattered on February 15,
where the jungle runs tropical
and would make a stateside greenhouse
blush with its opulence,

where Dana was, on her knees,
pulling up buckets, cleaning up broken
homes,

cataloguing past families
and their histories.

Where Dana’s ancient voice still sang,

“Come back to me,”

and still her voice
rang clear in his mind,
the steamy silk of her still in his heart,
and he hoped more than he dared dream
to find her once again,
in a waterfall that they could make

their own.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (02-16-2003 04:29 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 Karilea Rilling - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 02-16-2003 04:24 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

now..you have woven another dimension and a new tale...not at all dependent on the past...

nicely done... very nicely done
SPIRIT
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2 posted 02-16-2003 04:28 PM       View Profile for SPIRIT   Email SPIRIT   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SPIRIT

You write beautifully indeed.

I be me BUT who does me be?

Duncan
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Thinking that a truck stop
was as good a place
for any old truck to die,
Konrad hefted out his belongings,
took the title and registration
from the glove box,
and hoped his boots still had enough
sole

because the road was still long
between here, and the digs
where Dana should be.

Belize.  Where shards of pottery
were as plentiful as broken hearts
scattered on February 15,
where the jungle runs tropical
and would make a stateside greenhouse
blush with opulence,

where Dana was, on her knees,
pulling up buckets, cleaning up broken
homes,

cataloguing past families
and their histories.'

So we're going to get to meet Dana?  I like the direction you're taking this, Kari.  Stories for snowstorms...   Bet Mexico's a lot warmer, Konrad always was the smart one!
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Somewhere in time~


4 posted 02-16-2003 04:48 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Is it you?
WOW!!  Okay...now that I think I have everyone straight in my mind...
Don't leave me waitin' and beggin' for more..
This is great Karilea..and I love the direction you've taken here.
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Albert J. Allie
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5 posted 02-16-2003 06:00 PM       View Profile for Albert J. Allie   Email Albert J. Allie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Albert J. Allie

I so love your work! I do i do!
Martie
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6 posted 02-16-2003 06:03 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Karilea--even having lost part of the story, I find the telling of this bit intriguing.  You do this so well!
Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now


7 posted 02-16-2003 06:38 PM       View Profile for Bill Charles   Email Bill Charles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bill Charles

Sunshine - I love this tale, wow, nicely done...

BC
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it's good to read you again my friend. . . and I see that you've only gotten better. . .

wonderful work. . . just beautiful. . .

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Sunkissed
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9 posted 02-16-2003 08:41 PM       View Profile for Sunkissed   Email Sunkissed   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sunkissed

You're stories are right up there with the captain's, Sunshine, and that's saying a lot.

Yes, I'm addicted too!

Sunkissed.
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10 posted 02-17-2003 06:46 AM       View Profile for Kethry   Email Kethry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kethry

You're a natural at this storytelling.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown


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This is my favorite photo of you to date! You look wonderful! You radiate sunshine!

You put the "teller" in story! Another fine example of your writing capabilities!

May your alterego shine down on you this day,
EA
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Belize.  Where shards of pottery
were as plentiful as broken hearts
scattered on February 15,
where the jungle runs tropical
and would make a stateside greenhouse
blush with its opulence,

where Dana was, on her knees,
pulling up buckets, cleaning up broken
homes,

cataloguing past families
and their histories.

Where Dana’s ancient voice still sang,
==============================


ahhh now youve touched on one of my (many) *L* unrequited dreams....I always wanted to be a archeologist and play in the sand.
Love where your taking this...
so glad Konnie got over that migraine
The imagery and settting of this is perfect...
"Konrad’s truck made it to Nuevo Laredo,
but the rattling had begun back in Amarillo
and the blue smoke turned gray in San Angelo
then finally heaved a black sigh
when he pulled into the graveled pit
of a truck stop
and died"

very cool poetess of the sun
Ericc
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13 posted 02-17-2003 10:22 AM       View Profile for Ericc   Email Ericc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ericc

A story poeticly told.
Eric
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14 posted 02-17-2003 10:25 AM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

So beautiful, Karilea. I love these stories ya'll are doing....
More, please????
.
.
(BTW, I love your new picture. Like Linda said, you can see the sunshine shining through it....)  

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

kayjay
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15 posted 02-21-2003 01:18 PM       View Profile for kayjay   Email kayjay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kayjay

Konrad’s truck made it to Nuevo Laredo,
but the rattling had begun back in Amarillo
and the blue smoke turned gray in San Angelo
then finally heaved a black sigh
when he pulled into the graveled pit
of a truck stop
and died.

As one who has nursed clunkers for years, this really strikes home.  From other comments, this must be a part of a series?  It is a beautiful story. Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

JamesMichael
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16 posted 02-21-2003 02:56 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Very nice Sunshine...James
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17 posted 05-12-2004 01:37 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

You're a wonderful story-teller Karilea.

Am enjoying these.

M xx

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colours, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

 
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