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VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2003-02-16 01:07 PM



Slow Down

Hey, Jude, you move too fast,
time to make the morning last
old worn out suit and shoes
you don’t pay no human’s dues

you slip around in a fog
trip on over the family dog
blind sided you’re in a reel
no one knows quite how you feel.

Spinnin’ ‘round the world you go
back on your heels up on your toes
pretendin’ you know all is well
while you continue down the path to hell.

Slow down and look about
you’ll surely find there’s a good way out
a path with fewer prints laid down
a path that’s waiting with a crown.

A crown for all eternity
fashioned just for you, for me.

©February 16, 2003

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

© Copyright 2003 Virginia Salter - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
1 posted 2003-02-16 02:37 PM


VAS,
I like the concept and you carried it out to perfection.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Connel
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since 2002-11-04
Posts 736
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2 posted 2003-02-16 02:46 PM


I really liked this poem. Thanks for sharing.

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
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displaced
3 posted 2003-02-20 04:47 AM


very good!
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