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Riddle of Life
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Riddle of Life |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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Riddle of life...like a recipe tastier with spice..the shepherd has ventured into the hunter's domain and is accountable for himself; multiculturalism is a relatively recent phenomenon not to be ransacked or tossed randomly like salad in a bowl, it's so easy to apply elbow grease so difficult to iron out a persistent crease. Riddle of life is you'll reap what you sow it's so easy to solicit favorite support so as to aquire centre stage... and for all its temporary glory you idle in the spotlight with your index finger pointed to the public and rehearse "I am the shepherd, I shall not want"; yet behind the curtain, worldly views morph the actor steps into the shadow of public opinion the shepherd turns his cloth in for a hunters cloak then the weapon of misdeed is questioned was it the candleabra or the dagger?... beware of self-inflicted wounds..oh great land of "equal opportunities". Of boardroom scenes where each man nods and agrees who would argue in the face of prosperity Pacific Railway chairmen utter brief anecdotes a few words earn quick signatures then down the tracks of joint ventures stockholders reap what the tiller sowed it's so easy to agree to everything as long as you get a cut of the deal. Riddle of life..you'll search for exotic spice it's so difficult to account for social mistakes and effect a public appeal...which will forgive your morph from shepherd to hunter. [This message has been edited by Nan (02-23-2003 09:26 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssssss) Oh Martin, it is so very sad to see those who feel they were once satisfied with all they had get more gluttonous or avarice, it makes us wonder where all the real shepherds are and wonder if their lambs are still clean and if we will all ever truly be satisfied at all and desire can become out-dated! (sad sigh) This is absolutely poignant, sweet friend, you have my vote on this as I feel this truth needs to be spread to as many as possible through publication and perhaps awareness can be established, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martin, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (02-16-2003 12:21 AM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 Hey Martin, by the way, I tried to cast my vote for you but you currently have this post as a non-voting topic! If you want to make this a voting topic, click on the Edit button by your post (it is the second icon to the right on the toolbar), check-mark the box wishing for it to be a candidate for publication, and then others can vote! You can e-mail a moderator if you still have questions! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (02-16-2003 12:24 AM).] |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
thank you Noah, I see how the procedure is then  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
They say variety is the spice of life but I say your poetry is. I'm voting for this one. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Indeed there are many riddles. I really enjoyed this Martin. Definately food for the book.... I must have had my momma's will |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Good work here Martin. Book material for sure. ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Enjoyed. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Well it doesn't have to be roses or lyrics for love songs, right? Not that I wouldn't write something more akin to that..thank you kindly for your support Keth |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Gentle Spirit, Glad you appreciate this knowing and respecting your taste for the more romantic genre...it's not easy cooking up a poem on factual issues relevent today, inspired by articles coming from the economist or wherever the words cry for attention |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Hi Nancy, I left this with a more economical slant...this coincides finally with Chretien's speech before Parliament talking about multiculturialism..how it should be repsected...that ought to be another topic |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Hi Connel; Thank you for sharing, would like to read your poems topic [This message has been edited by ecrivan (02-16-2003 08:53 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Great reflections here... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Karilea, Vandana the key here is a lost vision of purpose on this earth..or a lost balance between tending ones needs and meddling elsewhere...hmm the idea is definitely not exhausted...thanks for clicking  |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Vandana you know I used to read a lot from Krishnamurti..and every now and then refer to his writings. [This message has been edited by ecrivan (02-23-2003 02:00 AM).] |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
"...it's so easy to apply elbow grease so difficult to iron out a persistent crease...." I wish I had written that. Well done. *s |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
I just think of how easy it is too fall out of our social element..and how difficult it is to correct our social balance once those elements go awry...that was the intended metaphor...thanks Doreen. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Interesting...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yaknow, I must be losing my mind, or someone is stealing my replies... I did read this before and thought I commented, but I guess not. Definate book material! |
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abbe Member
since 2003-01-20
Posts 131michigan, usa |
this is great... wow! i like the way you changed the words.. "I am the shepherd, I shall not want" makes a very powerful statement... i don't know what else to say. good read, good voice - a message that needs to be heard. i wish the shepherd would listen to the bleating of the flock. is it possible? [This message has been edited by abbe (02-23-2003 07:38 AM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I love the way you weave words and ideas together with actions, and challenge each to look at the actions and not just hear the words, which are often coated with deception and fantasy. One typo near the end...'everthing' really needs that 'y' Indeed, why must governments forever hide the truth under useless verbiage? |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martin, I think my Dad would love to read some of the views on here, and reply to them. He keeps very up-to-the-minute on all these issues. As for myself, I don't think that I have the knowledge you and others have on these issues, so I will just say that I love the way you write poetry....on whatever subject you decide to write about, you do an excellent job of it. This takes a lot of talent, Sir, to get your points across the way you do....so, I definitely think your work should be in Reflections. Thank you for sharing...  Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I enjoy how you aren't afraid to speak things most people only think.....GREAT!!!! Bridgette |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
enjoyed the read Charisma |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Thankyou Bridgette, you win a special appreciation for your remark...I am my own best critic so it hasn't been easy, |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
James, wish I just think and write of something purely 'passionate' like you these days and be happy with it..but you know by now that isn't me Passing Shadows No you haven't been in but the narrative style of the last six or so poems are similar except for the one on parental abuse..I find dry! |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Midnite, thanks for picking out the typo..I am tired like you of all the verbage..and treatment of the reader as if he doesn't have the right to know about business/government dealings for example at the upper levels. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Abbe, glad you can see through the riddle of words...will the bleating mean much..I should hope so, so the word 'democracy' is actually followed to the letter, instead of having leadership that acts in 'our interests'.. Ethyl Perhaps his spirit is looking at the work now, who knows..anyway you have been sweet to complement me so  |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
thank you Charisma |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
"Everything" is fixed.. and I enjoyed the read in the process... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
ecrivan - riddle of life written about well, my vote... BC |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I truly wish I would have known you in the 60's we could have marched together. Brother, that sure gave my age away didn't it? Well Martin, you have my vote, and I love the honesty of your writing most of all. [This message has been edited by Mysteria (02-24-2003 01:28 AM).] |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Nan, glad you enjoyed this...am working on a sequel hehe Bill, It makes sense doesn't it?good to see you're appreciating this [This message has been edited by ecrivan (02-24-2003 07:11 PM).] |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Mysteria, I would have liked to witness Woodstock in person |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is a piece that demands several reads... Nicely done, ecrivan..  |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
I suppose its appropriate for that Nan, the old standby, fight now and ask questions later is reflected through the metaphors of sherpherd transcending his traditional role...we know where we're all headed. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Martin, Every book needs the voice of one so socially sensitive. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Hi Larry, have the courage to speak out..great... yet it isn't beyond other poets here to do the same. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
it's so easy to agree to everything as long as you get a cut of the deal. Such a sad truth... integrity is too often sold... though for some, it never existed. Excellent write! |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
I thought I'd already voted for this. The mind just goes when you get to be my age. This is a tremendous write. Enjoyed the read.  |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
suthern, and when is it time to know that there are limits to profit making? White Rose, thanks for reading |
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