South Carolina, USA
I have to agree with Tim and Brad...There
is more to poetry besides just lines of
words with feeling....How it "sounds" to
the reader in their mind is also important.
For example....FEEL the flow of these two
lines....feel the meter...
Where cracks do creep in lava seep onto the earthen floor
and creatures crawl their dens to live beyond the ashen soar.
Are they perfect lines? In my opinion,
probably not. Do they have meter to them
and rhyme? Yes, certainly so...Could the
lines be improved upon? Could another
person be allowed to gaze upon the lines
and give the author their true and honest
opinion of them, possibly offering a change
to enhance what is already written? MOST
DEFINITELY!! That is what critique is all
about....it is about letting our guard down
a notch, admitting we are all learning...
and allow others to offer good and valid
criticism...without being condescending, as
Brad had stated earlier....
Geez, you guys got me going....