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Alicia
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0 posted 04-06-2002 04:25 PM       View Profile for Alicia   Email Alicia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alicia

I could wrap wax sheets around every drafting doorway
have pink-brick heat in an hour
and soak the film grain gray of yesterday in itís pools.
Or I could scrape the sticker fix of bruises from the walls
and watch them swell again
watch the thick, sick coat peel and burn,
feel every flaking layer shed then settle,
taste the pain in seething piles yes
and somehow I think I'd feel lighter because of it
god, just Live with the risk,...
because a single breath could lift an ash
slow draw the memories from the scars
(liquid devil through internal straws flesh red and knowing)
straight to the brain in a heartbeat though -
the alternative is backhanded abusive and sealing
a choke hold damn on white stained pages of history
it beats a feathered wing until itís bare
cold scraped and useless,
so instead I suppose, there could be peeling
could be the swelling and burning it through
so that one day there could be seeing
and breathing and dreaming, and me.

© Copyright 2002 Alicia - All Rights Reserved
skyshine
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1 posted 04-06-2002 04:29 PM       View Profile for skyshine   Email skyshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit skyshine's Home Page   View IP for skyshine

I liked reading this.

~sky

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Duncan
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2 posted 04-06-2002 05:41 PM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

watch the thick, sick coat peel and burn,
feel every flaking layer shed then settle,
taste the pain in seething piles yes
and somehow I think I'd feel lighter because of it
god, just Live with the risk,...
because a single breath could lift an ash

Brilliant...had to smile at the title!
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3 posted 04-06-2002 07:33 PM       View Profile for Mistletoe Angel   Email Mistletoe Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mistletoe Angel's Home Page   View IP for Mistletoe Angel



(smiles) Wow, this is a wonderful poem of starting again and introspection, sweet friend, I too love the excellent title, it shows that there are many ways to feel alive again and find true joy within our grasp and hope! (kiss on cheek) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Alicia, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton
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4 posted 04-06-2002 08:44 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Alicia,
Introspection can be toxic, enjoyed.

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5 posted 04-06-2002 08:47 PM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

Most powerful, I like this.
Sandra
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6 posted 04-06-2002 09:07 PM       View Profile for Bill Charles   Email Bill Charles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bill Charles

Alicia - first I've read of yours. Liked this very much...

BC
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7 posted 04-06-2002 10:09 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Cor   Email Elizabeth Cor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Cor

All of it.
But this:

"because a single breath could lift an ash
slow draw the memories from the scars
(liquid devil through internal straws flesh red and knowing)"

~

"and me"

this one, god, this one, A... esp the title, lol like my own poking poem... then you with your options lol (but not, also)... reading this over and over and over... exposes too much of me ( keep swallowing: literal and all metaphor combined).

is it possible to be awed and yet feel that I get 'used' to your writing? How I expect something amazing each time... so it seems commonplace, that the above is here... yet read each and again, amazement reborn... and understanding, again and again...

can one become raw from so much fascination, from so much discovery, from the constant pounding of 'yes'?

How can it be that my hunger for you has grown... sigh I've said too much here.. it's all in letters, written already or to be...

I ache for the box ~smile~

lol I just cursed and had to erase it (getting too comfortable here, forgetting where I am ~wink~) so: *curse* I know this over and over... wish you weren't feeling it now, wish you were curled and tingling with evening and the quiet of night, and the comfort that hush brings... that you were tired the way a child gets from a long, hard day of playing... how it feels to be swimming for hours and trampling in to the kitchen with your friends for dinner...child-like, daydreaming, smiling wide without knowing, feeling loved and sweet aching, that's how I want to know you're feeling...

so I'll wish it on you, and wish you good night.

I miss you, A. love. (how I don't even have to go back and edit it for spaces or clear wording. ~big smiles~)

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Cor (04-06-2002 10:15 PM).]

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8 posted 04-08-2002 03:28 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

quote:
because a single breath could lift an ash

ok Alicia, where do I start on this one??

your style reminds me so much of Plath and Sexton, and, to a degree, Margaret Atwood. . . so very real and close to the edge. . . every word just peals from your inner self. . .

there's so much here. . .so much that not even a re-reading could find it all. . . this one's going in the library, so I can read it at least 3 or 4 more times. . .

this needs to be read more. . . yes. . . very much so. . .

well done my friend. . . Peace, always. . .

------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

EagleOne
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9 posted 04-10-2002 07:09 AM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

Unmistakingly you my friend, excellent!

We are all just prisoners here of our own device ~ Hotel California, The Eagles

Alicia
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10 posted 04-21-2002 08:16 PM       View Profile for Alicia   Email Alicia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicia

~Well look who finally showed up to thank you kind, kind people for reading and leaving what you have. It's been a while, but please know that what you've left is here with me. You've said some things that spin me circles,...thank you. Thank you, so much really. *Peace poets.

and look who's hit 50, which is a little more than 14, and god have I found some treasures along the way today, was nice to spend some 'time' here finally.
Aenimal
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11 posted 11-28-2005 03:25 PM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aenimal


...so instead I suppose, there could be peeling
could be the swelling and burning it through
so that one day there could be seeing
and breathing and dreaming, and me

and what a beautiful site that would be, i've seen glimpses already

 
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