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nakdthoughts
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0 posted 2002-04-05 06:34 AM


Wish You Were There


Imaging myself in the eyes of you
Wondering just what your mind does view
Each time the words caress the feel
Of waiting thoughts, of touches real.

I sought out sheerness, and found it twice,
Tried on its meaning, arresting, nice.
Would please, and tease, I... feeling bold.
Never thinking age is old.

I sought out sheerness, and found each thread,
Tempts the mind when shy is shed.
"Bolden" not a word when pressed,
But that's the feel I felt, possessed.

Sassiness is not like me,
But adventuresome I try to be.
I sought out sheerness, tried its wear.
It stood me proud...
Wish you were there...


~M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

© Copyright 2002 Wynter Bliss - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-04-05 09:15 AM


like the play of word and image in this... nicely done!

A sensual feel with layers underneath to speak to the mind...


nakdthoughts
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2 posted 2002-04-05 09:33 AM


My intentions exactly...*s
to (s)peak the mind

M

* aren't words fun???

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3 posted 2002-04-05 09:35 AM


it succeeded quite well in doing so..
nakdthoughts
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4 posted 2002-04-05 09:42 AM


C... reminds me of  "C"ing is believing...
did I spell that correctly?

You are so much fun...
hugss
M

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5 posted 2002-04-05 09:46 AM


enjoyed
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6 posted 2002-04-05 09:47 AM


Yes words are fun.... and as for spelling... now one must be gentle with me on that count...I spell worse than one can imagine.

but your verse reminded me of this one....

Alone at last,
buttons slip through
eyelets to let drop
the days garments.

Puddled on the floor,
at feet now bare,
they look so much
less like armor…

So much more like
shimmering robes
worn to keep out the
cold of others heat.

Flesh and emotions
bared for all to see,
wanting the caress of
just another who thinks


like me...

nakdthoughts
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7 posted 2002-04-05 09:50 AM


wwoooowwwwww...I really love that poem C...both sensual and "tenderly you"...thank you ..you never fail to bring a rise in me...


vandana, thank you also for taking the time to read..

hugss
M

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8 posted 2002-04-05 09:53 AM


oh... better leave that rise line alone I guess as this is a public forum
nakdthoughts
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9 posted 2002-04-05 09:55 AM


yes...I think "C" knows  best...I definitely do not wish to be moved to adults...thanks

*w
M

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10 posted 2002-04-05 10:00 AM


i really enjoyed this M...
beautiful poem as for spelling it
does count for something yes but it's
not everything..meaning means the most!

take care.
amy

"you can't stop
the rain
from pouring down
can't stop the
world from turning 'round
can't stop me from
loving you
no matter
what you do"

nakdthoughts
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11 posted 2002-04-05 05:20 PM


Amy, thanks..I was in a playful mood thinking about treating myself to a bit of sheerness..wondering if I could get away with it at my age. *s

M

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12 posted 2002-04-05 07:40 PM


another exceptional one from you M. You know i love yours, not trying to be partial, but I can relate so well to you.
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13 posted 2002-04-05 07:48 PM


I sought out sheerness, and found each thread,
Tempts the mind when shy is shed.

I really love your poetry, Maureen...and this one is very special...
~many many hugs~

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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14 posted 2002-04-05 09:29 PM


Oh I love this. I once knew a man who took away all my shyness But now he is gone, and I am back in my shell. Sigh.
This is a fun and upliftng write.
Sandra

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15 posted 2002-04-05 09:55 PM


Kind of see through, without being trasparent?  I liked the look Maureen!
You go girl!!!  

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16 posted 2002-04-05 10:01 PM




(sigh) This is wonderfully passionate, sweet friend, may your heart find pure sheerness and may it always welcome you with loves true gifts! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maureen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

nakdthoughts
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17 posted 2002-04-06 08:13 AM


passing shadows..I  am glad you can relate  to me..sometimes I feel no one can understand..I appreciate your reading my words

Always,
hugss
M


Lyra...thanks yes, lately I am inspired a bit....perhaps it's thoughts of Spring, not sure...and today..I am feeling soooo much better I just wish to hold onto the moments.

many hugsss
M


Sandra...hmmm  well I am still shy but  trying to become bolder all the time...even if just for me..to prove I have something worthwhile to share instead of hide.
Thanks *s

Lori...as see through as one can be without being naked *w and of course..my thoughts are very transparent on this one *s

hugss
M

Noah...
Thank you sweet friend *s
M


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