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0 posted 2002-04-02 09:02 AM



As a child
Our house was torn apart
By a tornado that dropped
From an early Sunday sky
And rolled down the small valley
Taking trees in end over end
From places they had been rooted
To new places where they lay
In cracked splinter piles

There was a silence before the storm.

Then a low roaring rumble
Followed by screams from the tortured
Now carried along in the melee
Of dust grass tree and tin caught on edges
Of those deeply planted enough
To resist moving

Last night I heard the silence
And a rumble of words from your lips
Saying
I’m done

Now I wait for daylight
To ascertain the damage

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1 posted 2002-04-02 09:23 AM


happened to me too Cpat
such a memory you bring back

enjoyed it

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2 posted 2002-04-02 09:39 AM


DS...appreciate the comment. Sorry you have been there and hope the memory didn't make you wince.

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3 posted 2002-04-02 09:47 AM



Ow....

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4 posted 2002-04-02 09:54 AM


sorry
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5 posted 2002-04-02 10:06 AM


Ron

The power of a tornado...so vividly described, brings to life the emotional termoil you speak of.  You did this really well, my friend.

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6 posted 2002-04-02 10:15 AM


thanks Martie... have to really see one and it's aftermath to understand tornadoes...or the damage they do. Strange things... can list a house off its foundation and set it a few hundred feet away relatively undamaged..or flatten everything in the path. Drive straw into the side of a tree like it was a nail...and leave undisturbed an empty gas can sitting right next to the tree. Wierd storms...frightening... powerful... quirky

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7 posted 2002-04-02 02:27 PM


I enjoyed reading your words Ron..and I hope I am never in the path of a tornado..we do get warnings here once in a while..

           ~Victoria

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8 posted 2002-04-02 03:11 PM




(sad sigh) I sense some metaphor of heartbreak behind these words, sweet friend, I hope everything is OK now and the storm has calmed and the sun has come out to fill your heart with loves sunshine evermore! (big hugggssssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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9 posted 2002-04-04 01:24 AM


The damage is often times irrepairable,
like the yellow brick road is only a
figment of our imagination.  Sometimes
I wish it was only a movie!!!  

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10 posted 2002-04-04 10:30 AM


Victoria... Yes I hope you are never in the path of such a storm. Thanks for the comment.

Noah.. as always my friend your replies are appreciated

Blues: You are right, sometimes the damage is too great, and their is no yellow brick road, just pavement to scrape your knees when you fall and I sometimes seem to fall all too often.


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11 posted 2002-04-04 01:34 PM


The roof was lifted off our house by a tornado when I was a small child... my memories of that night are vivid but disconnected snapshots.

You've drawn such an excellent analogy between cataclysmic, life-altering events... well done!

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12 posted 2002-04-04 01:43 PM


Last night I heard the silence
And a rumble of words from your lips
Saying
I’m done

Now I wait for daylight
To ascertain the damage
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Wonderful write here Ron!
I know this feeling firsthand.
Hugs.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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