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The Fortune Teller.........................#1
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The Fortune Teller.........................#1 |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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One cool morning in September I was really, if I remember, Doing nothing more than passing time in bed And I felt that it would be a Kind of different idea To go downtown and have my fortune read. It's not that I believed in All the mumbo-jumbo weaved in The ability to read a crystal ball But curiosity implored me And besides, Septembers bored me So I went to have it done once and for all I was led into a cellar By some tiny little feller Announcing Madame Zodiac would appear. I surpressed a tiny giggle As she entered with a wiggle And a waddle in an outfit rather queer. I bit hard down on a knuckle To defeat a little chuckle As she grandly sat and stared into the ball. I tried hard supressing laughter But the words she spoke thereafter Left me weak with the absurdness of it all. I paraded around the room As she spoke her words of doom Trying hard to see the seriousness of it all But her words were so foreboding I felt circuits overloading And I fell in a laughing fit against the wall. I threw a ten-spot down as payment For such hearty entertainment As I bid my host a fare-the-well goodbye And the last thing I remember -- As I stepped into September Was her staring up with sadness in her eye. Only a month or two had passed When I found myself aghast And so perplexed by all I knew not what to do For every word that witch had told me Seemed to follow and enfold me And, one by one, they magically came true! Back with fevered haste I sped to That damp cellar filled with voodoo For I knew I couldn't rest until I knew How that sickly, pallid, wrinkled Dirty, grungy, rancid, crinkled Slimy, hocus-pocus fortune teller knew! "There's no secret here", she told me As I felt raw fear enfold me. "I knew you'ld finally come around at last. My crystal ball of special glass Won't show events that come to pass, All it really does is show the past!" And reality came to me As I felt her words go through me And the sense of it came slowly into mind For, if you want to look ahead, Don't look forward but, instead, All you have to do is look behind! Those mistakes you made back then You are going to make again Even though you think you're smarter than before And, if your past is filled with sinning From the moment of beginning, Then your future is assured forevermore. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Very cool story Michael (and quite amusing) but i disagree with the conclusion. VERY entertaining - uhmm... where do i throw the 'ten spot?'  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  BRAVO!!! Wow, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I too both agree and disagree with the morale of what she said, I feel it is important to look behind and to correct the mistakes we made, but we mustn't get absorbed in it either, we rather must wear our past like a coat of armor but embrace the future and look to what's ahead to find hope, and ultimately, find peace in the present and embrace each moment with joy so more time passes abruptly! (big huggsssssss) These are very powerful thoughts, sweet friend, we all love you so much, I LOVE IT!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Balladeer, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
You should have went to Madame Chipmunk..i hear shes pretty good too ha..this was just terrific Deery...a fun read..hugs ~Victoria |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Christopher....so that leopard CAN change its spots, after all? I see people make exactly the same mistakes over and over....but enough about me! Glad you enjoyed...for you it's on the house  Noah...wear the past like a coat of armor? My tailor would drop dead!  Thanks friend..Victoria...thanks for enjoying. Madame Chimpmunk is a fortune teller??? I knew she was a cookie... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Michael, funny and at the same time... a bit of humbling truth for ALL of us.. Thanx. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Michael, very cute, but, oh so true write. Enjoyed very much....as always! Hugs. ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Another great one, Michael...but alas....I don't tell fortunes....but if you think I am a cookie...maybe I am a fortune cookie and I have your fortune inside of me... but you would first have to break me open to find it......and, I'm afraid I would find that to be very painful...and besides, I don't break that easily  However, I am a witch......or so they tell me!  Anyway...I loved your poem! ~spooky witch hugs~ copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Great write my friend I've never been to a fortune teller, and I don't know If I ever will! Actually, I might go see one but I'd NEVER ever call Cleo, she's phony bologna |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
The story was superb sweet poet, filled with wisdom and truth, and I loved the cadence and rhyme scheme in this Michael ... you are a master at whatever style you choose. Well done indeed!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
How fun this is. But I think I am sunk if must repeat the past anymore. Aack! Sandra |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well done, 'Deer.... |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Another witty wander just perfect for April Fools. And as any of us, I loved it! Your style is somewhere between the classic limerick and a baudy night out on the town. All good wishes to you. ThisDiamond |
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butterflykiss989 Member
since 2002-02-19
Posts 52 |
This brought a smile to me face... a few of them actually thanks for sharing |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
I was more than a bit amused by this adorable story. It brought an immediate smile to my face ... My mother is a "psychic" and I find myself chuckling to myself sometimes over her overt predictions... until they come to pass.... at which time she swoops in with a matriarchal "I told you so" . Great write!!! I gotta get my mom to read this one now. Love, Light and Peace. Sherry Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
’Deer dearest heart what an absolutely wonderful poem this is, and how true in its essential details. The question is do we have free will? Or is all we do pre-destined? So our actions whatever they may be, don’t matter at all. Hard to say really, sometimes when my mind is befuddled by what I take to be a spooky coincidence I say no, what we do doesn’t matter at all, the end result will be the same. And then other times I believe in free will. Well, whatever the reality is, and since I’m neither omniscient nor even remarkable clear headed, I won’t know the answer. What IS clear is that YOU have always have had and will continue to have a superior and quite amazing gift to write brilliantly. As I’ve mentioned before it’s this power you have to involve the reader in the story, so they care about the characters, that makes you such a fabulous writer. Wonderful utterly utterly wonderful writing. I’m so glad I waited to write a comment here that made sense. Truly dear ‘Deer this is absolutely excellent writing and I thank you most sincerely for posting it again. NO ONE does it like YOU  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy   To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
quote: this gives me one more reason to celebrate ressurection day...thank you! [This message has been edited by Dulcinea (04-02-2002 04:52 PM).] |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
’Deer hi there, firstly I absolutely love this poem, this is another one that I hadn’t got around to reading. So thank you very much for posting it. You know this demonstrates what a really good writer you’ve always been, as mum has said it hooks into the sub-conscious and carries the reader into the heart of the story. Not only do you care for the character, you care about the outcome. What amazes me is the ability to mix comedy with a very real and important message, this is the sign of really good writer, and quality writing I suppose this is why you are an excellent poet to read, it is, as they say in the blurb, an absorbing and holistic poem, a total experience. Beautiful writing, a wonderful story with much truth, this is a splendid poem from the pen of the master. I wonder if I will make the same mistakes again? (Or as mum says isn’t it the mistakes that make us human? Yes I think the answer to both is probably)  Love and warm stuff As always Krissy  And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
HAHAHAHA MAGNIFICENT MY BALADEER.. this is wonderful. Oh I enjoyed it so much, You know I just have got to try writing one of these. But I don't know, up against some stiff competition here. Great write, I enjoyed it so very much, and I love Lyras picture. floriaFloria |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Much enjoyed! |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Enjoyed this very much, Sir Balladeer. Thank you! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
magnus....so it is. Thanks for reading! Enchantress...almost like magic! Madame C...don't feed me lines like that! I'll wind up in Adult for sure!!! Love the graphic..Rose Petal..you would have to go to jail too see Cleo right now!! LOL! Kit...tell me in person...soon! catalinamoon...ROFL!! Don't worry. Your misfortunes are from other poeple's mistakes...not yours! Sunshine...thank you!! Diamond lady...I like that definition! Thank you, sweet lady... butterflykiss..then it was all worth while. Thank you for the smiles.. magicmystery...must have been a rough childhood living with a psychic mom! Youcouldn't get away with anything!!!! mushy..good thoughts. Some think that all roads will lead to the same pre-ordained conclusion and I'm not sure I entirely disagree to a point but I still feel that our actions influence that outcome....which means I am no help at all! LOL! Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed it... Dulcinea...LOL! Can't wait to make them all over again, huh? I LIKE that way of thinking!! Krissy....make the same mistakes again? Mushy says you have never made any!! (and I believe her) Thank you for such wonderful words, dear girl....and what's a blurb? floria...LOL! I always like to see you laugh...and, yes, her graphic is awesome, isn't it? Now....back on your chair!!! krawdad...much appreciated! Thanks for reading.. SmartChick...and I thank you for stopping by!! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Deer, Well I'm a calvinist at heart so I would have to agree with you, although poetically I feel I should disagree. Great style with the words anyway that's one history that's worth repeating. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Great one and so very true....love it as always Dear Deer! Charisa |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
If we don't learn from our mistakes, we're doomed to repeat them... and being blonde, I can't even learn to put my car keys where I'll find them. *G* But at least I've learned where to find superb poetry... I've only to click on your name. *S* Excellent work... enjoyed the revisit. *S* |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Another one I had not read.....I love finding your old goodies. You are not writing enough for us now. latearrival |
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