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nakdthoughts
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0 posted 2002-03-31 09:12 AM



Contradiction of Feel

I feel the tension,
the tautness of face,
the lack of sleep,
the twitch of eye, as worry
begins to take hold,
my body controlled
by some unseen force.

I have only my words,
constricted,
anxious in wait,
some say,
expressing better than ever
in a non-rhyming way.

But...
In the course of a day,
the only pleasure derived
is from thoughts of you,
and even in their worst moments,
they were some of the best for me.

© Copyright 2002 Wynter Bliss - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2002-03-31 09:56 AM


Maureen,
You see you never know what's under the rock.

Duncan
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2 posted 2002-03-31 11:51 AM


I do like this style from you, Maureen.  Captures the condradiction well!
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3 posted 2002-03-31 12:08 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is wonderful, sweet friedn, my heart goes out to how you feel but alwways hold thes ememories close and look up to the best to come always for you! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maureen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Madame Chipmunk
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4 posted 2002-03-31 03:51 PM


I feel the tension,
the tautness of face,
the lack of sleep,
the twitch of eye, as worry
begins to take hold,
my body controlled
by some unseen force.

I liked the poem a lot, Maureen.  It reminds of my feelings about my cancer...
especially the part about being controlled by an unseen force...
Isn't it interesting how poems can have many meanings?.... ~hugggssss~

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

ethome
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New Brunswick Canada
5 posted 2002-03-31 05:11 PM


Yes even in the worst moments comes some of the best treasures...for all who care, I would say!
Very nicely done! As usual!

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