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JamesBowie
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big old Bangor Maine up by the shack

0 posted 2002-03-30 12:14 PM


the scent of dirty clothes drifts
as the lazy dog turns in circles

the red rimmed man has tired eyes
watching for his fate

they  settle on my hands
that are filled with the devils work

even though they hardly stop moving
but the eyes never waiver

as the noose cracks


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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
1 posted 2002-03-30 01:40 PM


personally, i dig this sharp vignette. i wonder how intentional it was that you spelled it "waiver" vs. "waver" ... personally, i like the idea that it's a play on words.

Peace

Chris

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2002-03-30 01:44 PM


James,
Ouch I felt that. Enjoyed

JamesBowie
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big old Bangor Maine up by the shack
3 posted 2002-03-30 11:38 PM


christopher-I did not expect anyone to pick up on that, good job and thanks
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