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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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I weep Thinking of the rivers, Their mist sweeping So swiftly through my life How they sometimes Refigure and conceal The losses of life and The mistakes made so Often I have touched your heart In so many different ways From different angles, Still I seek to touch you, The real bend of souls that We carry together, but only Once Seemingly I find Strength in the smallest Of stones and drifting wood, Worn and sometimes smoothed Settling over and upon The dreams of time Where, after storms They are seen in true Color I remember your eyes, The way you looked That Saturday sitting So silently under the tree Fingers dancing in the dirt I longed to know your thoughts But you couldn’t find the words To release the emotion you felt How I could’ve guessed, yet, The stranger was gathering in your Eyes; and the distance I felt sitting next to you Pausing thoughts I wished for rain A down pour of tears Falling from an endless sky To rebirth my heart, like A painting that could Haunt your nights From the ever present shadows And return you in one piece I closed my eyes and fell Back into you The night will be a long time Coming Then, maybe, from the river of life We can drink again Together I wait for you  ~Greeneyes~ Step through the barrier of my mind, enter my soul, feel my desire, let my eyes guide you into th [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (03-29-2002 01:12 PM).] |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
Wait only for one who drinks of you, and not with you. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Great title...beautiful poem... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I wished for rain A down pour of tears Falling from an endless sky To rebirth my heart, like A painting that could Haunt your nights From the ever present shadows And return you in one piece I closed my eyes and fell Back into you The night will be a long time Coming Then, maybe, from the river of life We can drink again Together I wait for you =============================== another hauntingly beautiful write my sisterinlonging...so many lines hit home in this bittersweet beauty from your pen of heart. Sometimes all I can do when I read you is sigh...and send you a ........   how about how good it feels to finally forgive you |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is soooo gorgeous, sweet friend, may you foreevr drink from the river of life with your love and feel every morning the warmth of the sun and at night share the moonlight happily! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is gorgeous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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TriXter Member
since 2002-03-20
Posts 112The One |
Ejoyed Why love something, that will never love you back? |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I wished for rain A down pour of tears Falling from an endless sky To rebirth my heart, like A painting that could Haunt your nights From the ever present shadows And return you in one piece Beautifully said, Lauren.... Absolutely perfect! ~hugs~copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lauren, A beautiful and lovely write. |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
sad but beautiful... as usual, your writing is suffused with a sense of expectant waiting... i hope you find what you're waiting for one day  -Dave |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lauren, May you be flooded with all you deserve. In the mean time it is a privelege to share your expression of heart and desire in poetic form that tells such deep truths. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Lauren, This is so beautiful! I can't believe I wasted so much time not reading your work. I'm going to have to take a trip through archives tomorrow Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
MR~ I agree....and thank you for your thoughts.... ~~ Sunshine~ thanks for stopping by...I appreciate your words.... ~~ Janet Marie~ I thank you, and know I feel the same when reading your work....  ~~ Noah~ Sweet Poet friend, I am forever seeking the river of life, thank you, thank you...for always taking your time to read.... ~~ [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (03-30-2002 09:20 AM).] |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
TriXter~ Thank you! ~~ Lyra~ I appreciate you so much.... thank you....~~ SY~ I always enjoy your kind comments.... ~~ Dave~ you give me more credit then worth,I so appreciate you....thank you... ~~ Larry~ Thank you....I will faithfully search, and hopefully one day find.... ~~ Tara~ You added a big smile to my face with your kindness and thoughts.... sweet poet...Love and Peace to all.... Lauren~ ~Greeneyes~ Step through the barrier of my mind, enter my soul, feel my desire, let my eyes guide you into th [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (03-30-2002 09:29 AM).] |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
"The stranger was gathering in your eyes" I particularly like that line a great deal. I think we've all both seen and have been that stranger from time to time. Most wonderful work, my friend. *hugs*Michael Stars will shine when I am gone |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Drink to me only with thine eyes And I will pledge with mine...Unknown This river flows into a sea somewhere, perhaps the Oceans of Time. And just how long can someone tread water anyway? I prefer to swim the river rather than sip from it! Chivalry is not dead. I saw it coughing up lung butter last night, but it was still alive. I think it has parvo. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Slowly floating down the river of life... with a cool drink in hand.... Very nicely done Lauren! |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Lauren, you write beautifully, though sadly. I wish I could use a bit of magic and make everything just the way you would like it. I can't. All I can do is appreciate your wonderful gift of poetry shared with us, as you write about things just the way they are. And assure you that you are still deeply loved by all of your friends, including me. God bless you abundantly. ((Lauren)) -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lauren~All I can say is, this is exquisite! ~Have a Happy Easter...Bunny Hugs to you, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A lovely expression...James |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You've quite a gift Lauren.... Your poems never fail to move me and view the scenery up close. Lovely~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (03-31-2002 04:33 PM).] |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Wow...I believe you have become my favorite poet on this site. This is very good FV...it reminded me of many things, such as a movie I seen and a song that I know of...and some personal experiences of my own. thank you for sharing, greeneyes. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very earthy and beautiful at the same time......tremendous mood evoking work.... I thoroughly enjoyed this read! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
oh dear, I almost missed this....and what a shame that would have been....... again dear friend your words touch this heart.....hugs to you...... On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
As much as I like this whole poem,the last line was so strong..I will wait for you forever. I feel that way all the time. But what do you do if they don't want you to wait? I haven't answered that one yet. Nice work, Lauren. Sandra |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Michael~ thank you....I appreciate you much ~~ RSEvans~ I havent treaded very well lately, thanks for your thoughts... ~~ Magnus~ Very slowly!! thank you friend for replying...~~ Silver Streak~ Thank you for your kind, kind reply..I feel blessed having you on my side.... ~~ Enchantress~ thank you or the HUGSSS I really needed that...Hope Easter was good for you too... ~~ JamesMichael~ Thank you for stopping by.... ~~ Lori~ I thank you for such a sweet response, I am glad my poems move you, as do you replies to me....HUGSSS ~~ Opeth~ What a sweet compliment....I am humbled by that....thank you sincerely~ ~~ ethome~ my mood as of late has been very provoking....(to my self) thank you, I appreciate your time! ~~ Donna~ Love you! ~~ Sandra~ I too am trying to figure it out...(I emailed you) Love to all, thank you so much for the kind words and thoughts....PEACE.... Lauren~ Step through the barrier of my mind, enter my soul, feel my desire, let my eyes guide you into the shadows of my heart [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (04-02-2002 09:41 PM).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
ok. . . how did I miss this one?? this is amazing. . . I find that I'm running out of words to describe the feelings and the emotions that flow from you like this water. . . remember to drink deeply. . .and to let the flow over you. . . well done my friend. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Just beautiful. simply and totally beautiful. floria Floria |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Sven~ thats a great compliment, thank you so much, I so appreciate your time in reading and replying....HUGSSS to you... ~~ FLoria~ Thank you my friend, for your time as well...I am glad you enjoyed this... HUGSSS so good to see ya here.....hope life will slow a little for you to enjoy....Love to all...Peace, be well Lauren~ Step through the barrier of my mind, enter my soul, feel my desire, let my eyes guide you into the shadows of my heart [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (04-03-2002 05:34 PM).] |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
How did I miss this? SHAME on me! Beautiful! 1derful! Lovely! GR8! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Interloper~ Thank you for you words....I enjoy seeing you name on my poems... Lauren~ Step through the |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Lauren, Yr words as gentle, sad and longing as I imagine yr eyes can be. Mike |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
too many favorite lines, nice ending |
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